InsaneZane
03-29-2004, 07:51 PM
It's still in production.... I already have stuff written that I didn't post yet, but I wanted to share my story with you.. i couldn't wait i guess.
heres a link...
http://www.angelfire.com/comics/zaneread/stories/tmnt/silenthill.html
Tell me what you think...keep in mind I have several ideas already laid out for the ending, but at the same time the story is incomplete.
Thanx.
EDIT: I AM curious of what you guys think........If it'll help, I'll go ahead and post it here.
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"Turtles in Silent Hill"
by Zane Read
NOTE: This story is set for the TMNT 2003 Universe
SOUTH ASHFIELD
"Dole! Get in Here!"
Thomas Dole was an officer for the South Ashfield Police Departmant. "Yes, Captain Ingram?"
"Dole, we havn't recieved word from S.H.P.D. as usual. We tried to contact a few other places in the small town, such as the Hospital....but no response. We think the power might be out or something over ther, anyway, we're a little worried because nobody's tried to contact us from thir side either. I want you to go and check it out and report back." ,said the Captain.
"Silent Hill?...........There's no word from the whole town and you're only sending ONE deputy?" ,Dole wondered.
"Are you questioning my decision, Dole?",the Captain replies, Dole hesitated, and Ingram continued,"We don't think it's anything too serious or we would've already taken higher action... just radio if you see anything......odd."
"I've heard rumors about Silent Hill from years ago... nasty stuff....." ,said Dole.
"I know what you're talking about, Thomas. That was all taken care of. Our own state officials cleaned up the whole town, it turned out to be nothing but a bunch of psycho crap, nuts destroying the town on a killing spree, pretty sick people. It's fixed now, repopulated." ,the Captain explained.
"Fine." ,said Dole as he started to walk away. "Come Back, Dole." said Captain Ingram.
Dole turned around. "You should take extra ammo, just in case." Ingram said.
Dole hesitated again, this time with a blank face on....then left.
NEW YORK
"Hey, Guys!.... I can't believe I'm actually sayin' this, but I got nuthin' to do tonight....." ,said Casey Jones, a kind-hearted redneck vigilante on the phone in his apartment.
"So?"... a voice replied over the phone. It was Raphael. A Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle.
"I'm bored... Let's do somethin'" ,said Casey.
"All right. Come Over, then. I'll entertain ya!" ,Raph said. "See Ya in a minute, then." ,Casey said.
So Casey got on his harley and sped off, he pulled off of the street into an alley, it was a shortcut to the guys....but a small girl was lying in the middle of the alley, making Casey quickly come to a complete stop. Casey got off of his bike and went to the girl's aid.
"Hey, wake up!" ,he said. The girl had to be as young as four years old. "Please?" ,he asked. The girl woke up and looked at Casey, frowning, she seemed very sad. "You shouldn't lay down here it's very dangerous......" , Casey said. She was completly silent and he continued, "Arn't you a little too... uhh... little to be out here by yourself." Then she spoke up, "Thay came four mummy."
"So, someone took your Mommy huh? ,he said. "Yup, da monsters." ,she said. "Uhhh... O...K... Anyway, where did you see her last?" ,he asked.
"We wuz goin' home on da twain." ,she answered. "OK...OK... First, Whats your name? , Casey asked. She didn't answer. "Oh C'Mon, I'm tryin' to help." ,said Casey. "Uhhh... A...manda." ,said the girl.
"Alright, now, Amanda.... Where do you live?" ,he asked. "We left the house." ,Amanda said. "Um... OK, I'll try again..." ,said Casey, "Amanda... do you know WHERE your house IS?" "We left it." ,she said...again.
LATER...
"Well, I thought since I was on my way over here anyway, I would see what you guys think." ,Casey said. Then Michelangelo spoke up,"Monsters huh?...any mugger in a mask couldv'e been a monster to a four year old....I'll talk to her." "Amanda, I hope THESE aren't your monsters." ,Casey asked Amanda. "Nope...these GOOD monsters." ,she said.
"That's right. I'm a GOOD monster..... can I show you my room Amanda?" ,Mikey asked. "Sure." ,she answered. Then Mikey and Amanda headed upstairs. "Well, you can expect a young kid like that not to know exactly where to locate her house." ,Raph mentioned.
Leonardo spoke,"She said, 'They came for her' right?....Did you ask her if she knew where these 'monsters' might have possibly taken her?" Casey replied,"I said, uh...sumthin' like that, but she didn't tell me nuthin', she just kept mumblin' a couple of letters at me." Now, Donatello spoke up,"Was she trying to spell something?" ,he said. Casey looked back at Leo, then Raph, both of them obviously expecting him to answer...and Casey continued to hesitate for a second,"DOH!" ,he said as he smacked his forehead.
"I got her to play some videogames, keep her busy for a while...and I found out a few things." ,Mikey said approaching the other guys. "Great, Mikey!" ,Raph exclaimed. So Mikey continued,"Yeah, Apparently, the 'monsters' have taken Mommy to a very evil place. She didn't want to actually SAY the name of the place, but she spelled it out for me... it looks like the 'monsters' should be keeping Mom in a town called... 'Silent Hill'." "I'm impressed with your skill to converse with a child, Mikey." ,said Leo. "Would you expect any less?" ,said Raph.
"Silent Hill?" ,Donnie asked again... he had that tone of voice like he was about to give some bad news, "I heard about that town... I recall some rumors about there being devil worshippers and such and alternate religious new gods' revival to take over the world in darkness and terror, the kind of sicko-psycho chaos kind of stuff." Mikey had a really surprised/shocked look on his face,"Wow......donnie, that sounds....uh.....um.......REALLY BAD!!!!!!!.....(cough,cough) I mean, uh.. gloomy...heh, heh." ,he said. "Shut up, Mikey!" ,said Raph,"Hey....um.. we should really try to help this kid." ,he said.
"We should get prepared...I actually agree with Mikey, this sounds pretty bad." ,Leo said. "Well, I guess, NOW you have something to do tonight, huh Case?" ,Raph stated. Casey chuckled, "huh,huh."
SILENT HILL
"Headquaters, this is Dole. I'm in Silent Hill. Theres nobody in sight, no traffic, but it is kind of hard to see because of a thick fog surrounding me...Not to mention, it's snowing here... in July!" The radio did not respond, just a loud static... getting louder, "Hello?....damn!" So he switched off his radio.
He did a U-turn in his squad car and started to head back...and then forced to slam on the breaks. Dole got out of the car... he couldn't believe his eyes... the street was gone, the street he had just driven on.... the entire ground as far as the eye could see... it was completly destoyed.
"No! This is impossible!!! I didn't hear any explosion! No Earthquake!!" He got back into the car... and tried to drive off... but the battery died on him, the car wouldn't move..."What the..." Then he looked out of the car windshield, in front of his own eyes, he witnessed the sky turn into a dark blood red color, so he got out of the car again. What was left of the street he was on, directly under his feet, it all transformed into rusty gates suspended over a bottomless pit. Dole started to pant in a panic, he tried to open the door of his car again, this time the door wouldn't open, it was stuck shut... it wasn't locked, he had extra keys on him, the handle wouldn't budge... and the key hole was suddenly filled with rust. "What!?!........What in god's name?.......I must be losing my mind in this town!"
MEANWHILE...
The Turtles, Casey and Amanda were already on thier way to Silent Hill via the BattleShell....
"Let me know if you see anything strange or out of the ordinary, OK Donnie?" ,said Leo. ".....or paranormal." ,Mikey added. "Will Do." ,said Donnie, who was driving the heavily armed vehicle.
"Ew..this place gives me the creeps." ,Mikey said. "We're not even there yet, Mikey." ,Raph mentioned. "Right...I know that. Even though it was premature, I am a master of preminition... see, look at that blinding fog ahead of us...... Plus, how come there's no traffic, huh?" ,said Mike. "It's late." ,Raph said.
Leo crouched down next to Amanda, "Have you ever been to Silent Hill before, Amanda?" ,he asked. "Nope." ,she replied. And Casey, who was sitting up front in the passenger's seat said,"I guess that rules out asking for directions." "We already have directions to Silent Hill, Casey. You meant Our way around town." ,said Raph. "Whatever....... You knew what I meant." ,Casey said.
A few more seconds passed in silence. "Since when did YOU start teaching Grammer, Raph?" ,Casey asked. "Wow, that was a fast response, Casey!.... You're just gonna HAVE to teach me how to enhance my comprehension skills." ,Raph said. and a few more seconds passed before Casey said,"...uh, What?" At this point Michelangelo burst out in laughter...."HaHahahahaha......." Curious, Casey continued to ask, "What?" Which just made Mikey laugh harder until Raphael got his attention, "Mikey!" "Heheheh huh... what?" ,Mikey asked and Raph continued,"You can start freakin' out now 'cuz look at that." Raph then pointed towards a sign ahead of them which read,"WELCOME to SILENT HILL! A Town You Will Never Forget."................
.........To be continued.........
heres a link...
http://www.angelfire.com/comics/zaneread/stories/tmnt/silenthill.html
Tell me what you think...keep in mind I have several ideas already laid out for the ending, but at the same time the story is incomplete.
Thanx.
EDIT: I AM curious of what you guys think........If it'll help, I'll go ahead and post it here.
___________________________
"Turtles in Silent Hill"
by Zane Read
NOTE: This story is set for the TMNT 2003 Universe
SOUTH ASHFIELD
"Dole! Get in Here!"
Thomas Dole was an officer for the South Ashfield Police Departmant. "Yes, Captain Ingram?"
"Dole, we havn't recieved word from S.H.P.D. as usual. We tried to contact a few other places in the small town, such as the Hospital....but no response. We think the power might be out or something over ther, anyway, we're a little worried because nobody's tried to contact us from thir side either. I want you to go and check it out and report back." ,said the Captain.
"Silent Hill?...........There's no word from the whole town and you're only sending ONE deputy?" ,Dole wondered.
"Are you questioning my decision, Dole?",the Captain replies, Dole hesitated, and Ingram continued,"We don't think it's anything too serious or we would've already taken higher action... just radio if you see anything......odd."
"I've heard rumors about Silent Hill from years ago... nasty stuff....." ,said Dole.
"I know what you're talking about, Thomas. That was all taken care of. Our own state officials cleaned up the whole town, it turned out to be nothing but a bunch of psycho crap, nuts destroying the town on a killing spree, pretty sick people. It's fixed now, repopulated." ,the Captain explained.
"Fine." ,said Dole as he started to walk away. "Come Back, Dole." said Captain Ingram.
Dole turned around. "You should take extra ammo, just in case." Ingram said.
Dole hesitated again, this time with a blank face on....then left.
NEW YORK
"Hey, Guys!.... I can't believe I'm actually sayin' this, but I got nuthin' to do tonight....." ,said Casey Jones, a kind-hearted redneck vigilante on the phone in his apartment.
"So?"... a voice replied over the phone. It was Raphael. A Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle.
"I'm bored... Let's do somethin'" ,said Casey.
"All right. Come Over, then. I'll entertain ya!" ,Raph said. "See Ya in a minute, then." ,Casey said.
So Casey got on his harley and sped off, he pulled off of the street into an alley, it was a shortcut to the guys....but a small girl was lying in the middle of the alley, making Casey quickly come to a complete stop. Casey got off of his bike and went to the girl's aid.
"Hey, wake up!" ,he said. The girl had to be as young as four years old. "Please?" ,he asked. The girl woke up and looked at Casey, frowning, she seemed very sad. "You shouldn't lay down here it's very dangerous......" , Casey said. She was completly silent and he continued, "Arn't you a little too... uhh... little to be out here by yourself." Then she spoke up, "Thay came four mummy."
"So, someone took your Mommy huh? ,he said. "Yup, da monsters." ,she said. "Uhhh... O...K... Anyway, where did you see her last?" ,he asked.
"We wuz goin' home on da twain." ,she answered. "OK...OK... First, Whats your name? , Casey asked. She didn't answer. "Oh C'Mon, I'm tryin' to help." ,said Casey. "Uhhh... A...manda." ,said the girl.
"Alright, now, Amanda.... Where do you live?" ,he asked. "We left the house." ,Amanda said. "Um... OK, I'll try again..." ,said Casey, "Amanda... do you know WHERE your house IS?" "We left it." ,she said...again.
LATER...
"Well, I thought since I was on my way over here anyway, I would see what you guys think." ,Casey said. Then Michelangelo spoke up,"Monsters huh?...any mugger in a mask couldv'e been a monster to a four year old....I'll talk to her." "Amanda, I hope THESE aren't your monsters." ,Casey asked Amanda. "Nope...these GOOD monsters." ,she said.
"That's right. I'm a GOOD monster..... can I show you my room Amanda?" ,Mikey asked. "Sure." ,she answered. Then Mikey and Amanda headed upstairs. "Well, you can expect a young kid like that not to know exactly where to locate her house." ,Raph mentioned.
Leonardo spoke,"She said, 'They came for her' right?....Did you ask her if she knew where these 'monsters' might have possibly taken her?" Casey replied,"I said, uh...sumthin' like that, but she didn't tell me nuthin', she just kept mumblin' a couple of letters at me." Now, Donatello spoke up,"Was she trying to spell something?" ,he said. Casey looked back at Leo, then Raph, both of them obviously expecting him to answer...and Casey continued to hesitate for a second,"DOH!" ,he said as he smacked his forehead.
"I got her to play some videogames, keep her busy for a while...and I found out a few things." ,Mikey said approaching the other guys. "Great, Mikey!" ,Raph exclaimed. So Mikey continued,"Yeah, Apparently, the 'monsters' have taken Mommy to a very evil place. She didn't want to actually SAY the name of the place, but she spelled it out for me... it looks like the 'monsters' should be keeping Mom in a town called... 'Silent Hill'." "I'm impressed with your skill to converse with a child, Mikey." ,said Leo. "Would you expect any less?" ,said Raph.
"Silent Hill?" ,Donnie asked again... he had that tone of voice like he was about to give some bad news, "I heard about that town... I recall some rumors about there being devil worshippers and such and alternate religious new gods' revival to take over the world in darkness and terror, the kind of sicko-psycho chaos kind of stuff." Mikey had a really surprised/shocked look on his face,"Wow......donnie, that sounds....uh.....um.......REALLY BAD!!!!!!!.....(cough,cough) I mean, uh.. gloomy...heh, heh." ,he said. "Shut up, Mikey!" ,said Raph,"Hey....um.. we should really try to help this kid." ,he said.
"We should get prepared...I actually agree with Mikey, this sounds pretty bad." ,Leo said. "Well, I guess, NOW you have something to do tonight, huh Case?" ,Raph stated. Casey chuckled, "huh,huh."
SILENT HILL
"Headquaters, this is Dole. I'm in Silent Hill. Theres nobody in sight, no traffic, but it is kind of hard to see because of a thick fog surrounding me...Not to mention, it's snowing here... in July!" The radio did not respond, just a loud static... getting louder, "Hello?....damn!" So he switched off his radio.
He did a U-turn in his squad car and started to head back...and then forced to slam on the breaks. Dole got out of the car... he couldn't believe his eyes... the street was gone, the street he had just driven on.... the entire ground as far as the eye could see... it was completly destoyed.
"No! This is impossible!!! I didn't hear any explosion! No Earthquake!!" He got back into the car... and tried to drive off... but the battery died on him, the car wouldn't move..."What the..." Then he looked out of the car windshield, in front of his own eyes, he witnessed the sky turn into a dark blood red color, so he got out of the car again. What was left of the street he was on, directly under his feet, it all transformed into rusty gates suspended over a bottomless pit. Dole started to pant in a panic, he tried to open the door of his car again, this time the door wouldn't open, it was stuck shut... it wasn't locked, he had extra keys on him, the handle wouldn't budge... and the key hole was suddenly filled with rust. "What!?!........What in god's name?.......I must be losing my mind in this town!"
MEANWHILE...
The Turtles, Casey and Amanda were already on thier way to Silent Hill via the BattleShell....
"Let me know if you see anything strange or out of the ordinary, OK Donnie?" ,said Leo. ".....or paranormal." ,Mikey added. "Will Do." ,said Donnie, who was driving the heavily armed vehicle.
"Ew..this place gives me the creeps." ,Mikey said. "We're not even there yet, Mikey." ,Raph mentioned. "Right...I know that. Even though it was premature, I am a master of preminition... see, look at that blinding fog ahead of us...... Plus, how come there's no traffic, huh?" ,said Mike. "It's late." ,Raph said.
Leo crouched down next to Amanda, "Have you ever been to Silent Hill before, Amanda?" ,he asked. "Nope." ,she replied. And Casey, who was sitting up front in the passenger's seat said,"I guess that rules out asking for directions." "We already have directions to Silent Hill, Casey. You meant Our way around town." ,said Raph. "Whatever....... You knew what I meant." ,Casey said.
A few more seconds passed in silence. "Since when did YOU start teaching Grammer, Raph?" ,Casey asked. "Wow, that was a fast response, Casey!.... You're just gonna HAVE to teach me how to enhance my comprehension skills." ,Raph said. and a few more seconds passed before Casey said,"...uh, What?" At this point Michelangelo burst out in laughter...."HaHahahahaha......." Curious, Casey continued to ask, "What?" Which just made Mikey laugh harder until Raphael got his attention, "Mikey!" "Heheheh huh... what?" ,Mikey asked and Raph continued,"You can start freakin' out now 'cuz look at that." Raph then pointed towards a sign ahead of them which read,"WELCOME to SILENT HILL! A Town You Will Never Forget."................
.........To be continued.........