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Old 12-31-2004, 05:55 AM   #6
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I just finished reading the first part of Dead Voltage. Pretty cool. I'm interested to know what's going to happen in this ritual about to be performed. Sounds creepy. I did notice a couple instances when the narrative jumped into present tense, which really pulls the reader out. Might want to fix that. Also, there are just a few typos that can be kind of annoying.
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