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Old 08-28-2005, 08:46 PM   #26
remix17
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I came here on a whim, and behold! you had updated.

As usual the art is above-par. I love Shredder and Krang, so I was enjoying their interaction, especially since their partnership is deteriorating. Funny how Shredder announced the high-tension double-betrayal would have to wait once the turtles arrived.

However, I really think you need to improve your grammar--when to put apostrophes, commas, and the like. For instance, "you are" is "you're" not "your." When a character adresses another chracater, use a comma. For example:

If the name is the start of a sentence:

Shredder: Krang, shut up!

The middle:

Shredder: Shut up, Krang, now!

The end:

Shredder: Shut up, Krang!

Anyway, your comic is great, and I look forward to more, especially since the story hasn't technically "started" yet.
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