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Old 03-06-2017, 11:45 AM   #3
TigerClaw
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Originally Posted by neatoman View Post
Here are a couple of suggestions:
  1. Trim the scenes of April and Casey in custody, remove entirely if possible.
  2. Remove the dick and fart jokes.
  3. Remove the explaination of Bebop and Rocksteady's mutation, none is better than what we got.
  4. Remove the "we could be human" plotline, it went nowhere.
  5. Add a text crawl or something explaining some of the unclear things, like who or what Krang is. You could add a new explaination for how the mutation worked.

And if there are deleted scenes that fixes any of this, please reinsert them.

I must admit, it's a good idea to start with the transfer scene.
I had no problem with the dick joke, If you were mutated, You too would check between your pants if your parts are still there.
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