Technodrome Remix issue 2

[Master Splinter]

Originally Posted by shuriken

Funny how that worked out... Thanks for the patience guys, and I'm confident this will come together nicely and come out hust as good if not better than the first.

Anyone want to take a stab at lettering this? I have been extremely swamped.

-ms

[Jephael]

I'd be happy to do the lettering for you.

[Master Splinter]

Ladies and Gentlemen, may I present, on this 19th of June, in the year of 2015, 3 1/2 years later, MIRAGE VOLUME 1 – NUMBER 02 (FAN REMIX COMIC).

Special thank you to those that pressed on until the end. Now, whose ready for #3?

-ms

[Lordmylar06]

Awesome! Haha, it's hard to believe I drew that page so long ago.

[pl212]

wow, this took forever lol im glad to see it made its way out.
Good job guys!

[Candy Kappa]

So, when starts the project on #3?

[oldmanwinters]

Nice job folks. And thanks as bunch to MasterSplinter for putting this whole thing together over this last half decade or so.

I did spot a few dialogue typos and omissions though. Maybe they can be corrected on a revised edition?
On page 5: the two middle right panels lack any dialogue even though there is some blank "word bubble" space.
On page 13: "Shoul" rather than "should" and "wich" rather than "which"
On page 31: "Baster" rather than "Baxter", "Inclued" rather than "included", "fo" rather than "of"

Page 19 appears to be missing.

On some panels, the text has to be so small to fit the bubbles, that I wonder if we might as well take some freedoms to reconfigure that. I think the last speech bubble on page 22 could be broken up and the last part of the text could probably go above and below the four Turtle profile pics: "It is the only way to put an end to this madness. Go with care, my sons... and return with swiftness!" Here's a rough example of what I had in mind for the layout:

Spoiler:

The dialogue changes were a bit of a surprise though. Especially weird seeing the salty language on my own panels (particularly page 14), since it isn't my storytelling style. I suppose all the variety of art styles, ranging from IDW to lots of Fred Wolf toon homages probably did necessitate some additions, such as changing the name of the news reporter to "Langinstein," and the references to April's attempted college major in broadcast journalism.

Among the pages I hadn't already seen in full, I really like the way that Buffy's,masterturk's, Koschei's #21, and Psyrusly's came out.

Originally Posted by Candy Kappa

So, when starts the project on #3?

Uh...

[Master Splinter]

Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

Nice job folks. And thanks as bunch to MasterSplinter for putting this whole thing together over this last half decade or so.

I did spot a few dialogue typos and omissions though. Maybe they can be corrected on a revised edition?
On page 5: the two middle right panels lack any dialogue even though there is some blank "word bubble" space.
On page 13: "Shoul" rather than "should" and "wich" rather than "which"
On page 31: "Baster" rather than "Baxter", "Inclued" rather than "included", "fo" rather than "of"

Page 19 appears to be missing.

On some panels, the text has to be so small to fit the bubbles, that I wonder if we might as well take some freedoms to reconfigure that. I think the last speech bubble on page 22 could be broken up and the last part of the text could probably go above and below the four Turtle profile pics: "It is the only way to put an end to this madness. Go with care, my sons... and return with swiftness!" Here's a rough example of what I had in mind for the layout:

Spoiler:

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a56...ps53q36rta.jpg

The dialogue changes were a bit of a surprise though. Especially weird seeing the salty language on my own panels (particularly page 14), since it isn't my storytelling style. I suppose all the variety of art styles, ranging from IDW to lots of Fred Wolf toon homages probably did necessitate some additions, such as changing the name of the news reporter to "Langinstein," and the references to April's attempted college major in broadcast journalism.

Among the pages I hadn't already seen in full, I really like the way that Buffy's,masterturk's, Koschei's #21, and Psyrusly's came out.



Uh...

I updated both files to include the missing page. Jephael did 98% of the lettering so any changes to dialogue or character name changes were done on his part. If he would like to correct those pages feel free to send them over and I will update the comic. I butchered page 31's text. That was the last page I added so I'm sure I was just rushing.

I think everyone did a great job on this one, it just took forever for it to come together. I really have no interest in doing the third issue at this point in time.

-ms

[Donnie]

Originally Posted by Master Splinter

I updated both files to include the missing page. Jephael did 98% of the lettering so any changes to dialogue or character name changes were done on his part. If he would like to correct those pages feel free to send them over and I will update the comic. I butchered page 31's text. That was the last page I added so I'm sure I was just rushing.

I think everyone did a great job on this one, it just took forever for it to come together. I really have no interest in doing the third issue at this point in time.

-ms

Wow, thank you for putting this together. I'm glad it finally saw the light of day! Fantastic job, everyone.

MS, can you please correct page 31's text? Since my name is attached to it, I'd rather it not look like that was my doing.

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Master Splinter

I updated both files to include the missing page.

-ms

Sweet! It is cool to see all the subtle little surprises scattered across every page and panel.

[Jester]

Nice work...but what's with the added dialogue (and profanity) on 14?
EDIT: Oh...reading skills. Come on, Jeff....

[Jephael]

Originally Posted by Jester

Nice work...but what's with the added dialogue (and profanity) on 14?
EDIT: Oh...reading skills. Come on, Jeff....

Just wanted to give the story a little extra spice, Mr. Mom! Be glad Andrew Modeen isn't running this project, otherwise the whole thing would be littered with f-bombs and gory violence!

To be honest, I don't even remember what I wrote.
EDITED AFTER READING ISSUE: Oh wow, I must've been in a rotten mood while working on that part.

[Jester]

It wouldn't have been so bad if it hadn't been on Winters page, 'cause I know Adam has a better vocabulary....that and it's the ONLY page with major dialogue revisions.

The page:

Spoiler:

[Jephael]

Originally Posted by Jester

It wouldn't have been so bad if it hadn't been on Winters page, 'cause I know Adam has a better vocabulary....that and it's the ONLY page with major dialogue revisions.

The page:
http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y13...ManWinters.jpg

Well, that's your problem, dude. I don't know Adam from... well, Adam!!!

BTW, I just noticed I misspelled "ladder" with "latter" on that page. That's totally my bad.

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Jephael

Well, that's your problem, dude. I don't know Adam from... well, Adam!!!

BTW, I just noticed I misspelled "ladder" with "latter" on that page. That's totally my bad.

Heh, yeah, an updated edition might be well needed after the community has a chance to look it over together. I actually would appreciate toning down the severity and frequency of the saltier vocab on my page that Jester posted above. It won't really bother me if there's no opportunity to change it soon, but I do wish I could at least read over the recommended text additions since some folks might assume the dialogue alterations were either my idea or received my approval.

[Master Splinter]

Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

Heh, yeah, an updated edition might be well needed after the community has a chance to look it over together. I actually would appreciate toning down the severity and frequency of the saltier vocab on my page that Jester posted above. It won't really bother me if there's no opportunity to change it soon, but I do wish I could at least read over the recommended text additions since some folks might assume the dialogue alterations were either my idea or received my approval.

If Jeff doesn't get me an updated version by tomorrow evening I will correct it myself while I am correcting #31.

-ms

[Donnie]

Originally Posted by Master Splinter

If Jeff doesn't get me an updated version by tomorrow evening I will correct it myself while I am correcting #31.

-ms

Thank you, MS.

[Jephael]

Originally Posted by Master Splinter

If Jeff doesn't get me an updated version by tomorrow evening I will correct it myself while I am correcting #31.

-ms

I didn't even think the language was that bad. Hell, it's no worse than what you hear Michael J. Fox speak in the Back to the Future trilogy, but if you really want me to take out the bad words, I'll do it. MS, can you check your PM box ASAP? I forget your e-mail and I need a copy of the original.

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Jephael

I didn't even think the language was that bad. Hell, it's no worse than what you hear Michael J. Fox speak in the Back to the Future trilogy, but if you really want me to take out the bad words, I'll do it. MS, can you check your PM box ASAP? I forget your e-mail and I need a copy of the original.

It would be more of a personal favor to me, Jeph, as opportunity allows. I've never associated bad language with my own artistic style. If you would just prefer to just paste in some cartoonish censorship symbols like one might see in the Comics section of a random Sunday newspaper, I think that would be fine too.

Take Calvin, for example:
https://dwellingintheword.files.word...lvin-angry.jpg

BTW, the amount of profanity in the BttF movies actually is a little surprising, but the PG rating tended to encompass a PG-13 back in the 80s.

[Jephael]

Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

I've never associated bad language with my own artistic style.

That's understandable and I can respect that. Check out the PM I sent ASAP!!!