01-31-2019, 09:25 PM | #1 |
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TMNT Project Dimension X Film Script
I just finished the first draft of my Ninja Turtle script.
Would love some blunt feedback from you guys for rewrites. Its a very loooong script. I'm going to start trimming it down now to the proper script format. Just looking to see how story flows, character development, plot holes, things that don't make sense, jokes that don't land, etc... Be as brutal as you can so I can tweak it. I also registered the story through WGA. So please don't try and steal it. I worked pretty hard on this. Thanks! Share if you like it! https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1319478...-X-Film-Script
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02-01-2019, 05:38 AM | #2 |
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Ninja Turtles
I think TMNT will find it easier if you move it to the Ninja Turtles (main) section.
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02-04-2019, 03:34 PM | #3 |
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Do you have it available as a PDF somewhere?
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02-04-2019, 04:30 PM | #4 |
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I will shorty. I’m currently running it through Celtx to get it in the proper format. Once I’m done, I could upload the PDF.
I should be done with this in about 1 or 2 days depending how much I get done tonight.
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02-04-2019, 04:34 PM | #5 |
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I like this a lot so far!
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02-04-2019, 04:45 PM | #6 |
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Thanks.
Lemme know what you think when you finish it.
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02-05-2019, 06:16 AM | #7 |
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I'm checking it out and it's a great idea. However, one problem (and it's not you who began this)
Sometimes , you treat Dimension X as a galaxy (which is OK, the Archie comics actually went that route) and sometimes as a dimension or universe. So, what it is in your script? |
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Quote:
It was code named Dimension X by the US. It’s never called Dimension X by anyone there.
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02-05-2019, 10:08 AM | #9 |
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Dimension X
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02-08-2019, 04:56 PM | #10 |
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Here’s the link to the PDF First Draft. I believe you can download it from there.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1FxD...w?usp=drivesdk
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02-09-2019, 01:47 PM | #11 |
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Sequels
Will you write sequels too?
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02-09-2019, 01:56 PM | #12 |
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I’d like to. I need a break first.
I’ll see if I get any feedback from this one. I have a general idea where story will go.
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02-09-2019, 03:47 PM | #13 |
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07-19-2019, 05:07 PM | #14 |
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I’m starting to get notes together for the sequel. Finally might start to put pen to paper.
If anyone did happen to read some of this, I know it’s ridiculously long, lemme know what you thought. Thanks.
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08-05-2020, 06:05 PM | #15 |
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I just finished reading your script today --for reference point, I began reading it a few weeks ago---and it was tubular, to say the least.
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09-14-2020, 08:33 AM | #16 |
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Hey just saw this post.
Thanks man! Appreciate it. Hopefully I’ll have another one at some point eventually.
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