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Old 01-31-2019, 09:25 PM   #1
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TMNT Project Dimension X Film Script

I just finished the first draft of my Ninja Turtle script.

Would love some blunt feedback from you guys for rewrites.

Its a very loooong script. I'm going to start trimming it down now to the proper script format.

Just looking to see how story flows, character development, plot holes, things that don't make sense, jokes that don't land, etc...

Be as brutal as you can so I can tweak it.

I also registered the story through WGA. So please don't try and steal it.
I worked pretty hard on this.

Thanks!
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https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1319478...-X-Film-Script
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Old 02-01-2019, 05:38 AM   #2
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Ninja Turtles

I think TMNT will find it easier if you move it to the Ninja Turtles (main) section.
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Old 02-04-2019, 03:34 PM   #3
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Do you have it available as a PDF somewhere?
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Old 02-04-2019, 04:30 PM   #4
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Do you have it available as a PDF somewhere?
I will shorty. Iím currently running it through Celtx to get it in the proper format. Once Iím done, I could upload the PDF.

I should be done with this in about 1 or 2 days depending how much I get done tonight.
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Old 02-04-2019, 04:34 PM   #5
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I like this a lot so far!
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Old 02-04-2019, 04:45 PM   #6
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I like this a lot so far!
Thanks.
Lemme know what you think when you finish it.
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Old 02-05-2019, 06:16 AM   #7
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Thanks.
Lemme know what you think when you finish it.
I'm checking it out and it's a great idea. However, one problem (and it's not you who began this)

Sometimes , you treat Dimension X as a galaxy (which is OK, the Archie comics actually went that route) and sometimes as a dimension or universe. So, what it is in your script?
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I'm checking it out and it's a great idea. However, one problem (and it's not you who began this)

Sometimes , you treat Dimension X as a galaxy (which is OK, the Archie comics actually went that route) and sometimes as a dimension or universe. So, what it is in your script?
My Dimension X is another galaxy far from the Milky Way.
It was code named Dimension X by the US.

Itís never called Dimension X by anyone there.
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Old 02-05-2019, 10:08 AM   #9
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My Dimension X is another galaxy far from the Milky Way.
That's my favourite take on Dimension X too. Meanwhile, it seems the government scientists first believe it is a dimension.
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Hereís the link to the PDF First Draft. I believe you can download it from there.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1FxD...w?usp=drivesdk
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Old 02-09-2019, 01:47 PM   #11
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Sequels

Will you write sequels too?
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Will you write sequels too?
Iíd like to. I need a break first.

Iíll see if I get any feedback from this one.

I have a general idea where story will go.
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I have a general idea where story will go.
That's easy to understand when reading who Traag mentions at the end.
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Old 07-19-2019, 05:07 PM   #14
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Iím starting to get notes together for the sequel. Finally might start to put pen to paper.

If anyone did happen to read some of this, I know itís ridiculously long, lemme know what you thought.

Thanks.
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