08-27-2012, 02:28 PM | #1 |
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TMNT Movie Script
WHAT IS THIS ALL ABOUT? Poster courtesy of the talented and supportful Blossombrooks After reading the TANT script, I decided to pretty much begin writing a feature-length TMNT movie script of my own. This is strictly for fun, but if someone WANTS to do something with it, it'll be here for thier use. I will be using this thread to share snippets from the script, details about the plot, and even supplying you with some of the songs from the "soundtrack" I'm putting together for it. I've also written two original songs (there just lyrics though, no music) for the movie. Give me your thoughts on the snippets I'll provide over the next few weeks Keep in mind that, as an experiment, and just for the sake of debate, I will be taking SLIGHT liberties, TMNT has always been about reinvention, so I won't be 100% faithful to the comics THE PREMISE "Magic Monday" is the day a city-renowned building meets it's final curtain call....but what will cause it's downfall? What has been at the center of so many recent demolition jobs, ones that involve no explosives? Journalist April O'Neil is determined to uncover the truth, but as she peers into the rabbit hole, she, her good friend Irma Langestien, and April's boyfriend Casey Jones are swept into an altogether more sinister, warped version of wonderland. Saved from near-death by four strange creatures highly skilled in an ancient art of combat yet heavily influenced by the modern world and the odd hormone or two, April and Casey embark on a wondrous journey, discovering a secret lair beneath the streets, bonding with new friends, and uncovering another wild and eccentric world that must stay hidden. To most of contemporary civilisation, they are shadows, to others, they are guardian angels, to others like the ruthless Saki and his underlings, they are a target. For April and Casey, they're just too weird for words. They are the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles. Read the Novelization here SCRIPT SAMPLES SAMPLE ONE Spoiler:
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THE SOUNDTRACK 1. "I Try So Hard" by Tribal Ink 2. "Life Again" by Decypher Down 3. "World On Fire" by Sarah McLachlan 4. "We Are Shadows" by David Blyth (Original song) 5. "Towards The Day" by David Blyth (Original Song) 6. "These Days Are Ours" by Emma Hewitt 7. "Secrets From The Underground" by The Offspring 8. When You're Young By 3 Doors Down (Leo's theme) 9. Something New by Girls Aloud (April's theme) PROMOTIONAL ARTWORK Art by Blossombrooks[/center]
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Updated with a new script sample
SAMPLE FOUR Spoiler:
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09-05-2012, 03:49 AM | #3 |
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All right, not trying to be too nitpicky here.... Bit all your references to the IPad app they have? I think you mean IPad tablet. An app is an application. At first I thought you were just using the term awkwardly, but when you started saying things like hand me that app... Yeah, I think Inigo Montoya said of best: "You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means"
Beyond that, it looks okay enough, I guess, but something seems a little... Off about the dialogue. I wish I could be more specific, nothing sucks more than vague criticism, but a lot of of just doesnt seem very... Natural, I guess. I find it sometimes helps to by a friend or two to read the parts like you're rehearsing a play. If there's something wrong with it, one of you will notice. Course, I could be wrong anyway, I've done very little in the way of screenplay writing (Stan few scenes of a Mega Man X movie, and a pilot for a proposed Teen Titans revamp. Neither were seen by anyone worth mentioning), so I may very well.be talking out my ass. But it looks promising, keep at it. |
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I guess the dialouge could be a little more...loose and fluent, at least on the human side. I'll look up some examples just to get a better feel. A lot of comics I've read have this sort of dialouge (including TMNT books) Thanks for the interest, always appreciate help.
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09-05-2012, 11:09 AM | #5 |
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Another thing hat helps me and my friend, who both write on occasion, is for us to edit each others work. It's not only good for spelling and grammar, its great for continuity and clarity. Sometimes something that makes sense to you won't to someone else. That may help, just in general. Of course, my sister writes probably more than both of us, and doesn't use an editor, so again, different strokes, different folks, etc.
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09-06-2012, 04:00 AM | #6 |
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Beleive me, there's going to be things in this that will only make sense to me and that's half the fun of sharing it.
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09-13-2012, 03:17 PM | #7 |
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Added plot synopsis
Added new samples SAMPLE FIVE Spoiler:
SAMPLE SIX Spoiler:
I should point out that these samples arent neccersarily in chronological order.
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Added some promotional artwork (something incredibly simple, I'm not Picaso where this is concerned)
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09-18-2012, 08:14 AM | #9 |
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Rats, had to do some proof-reading on this, my dyslexia got the better of me at some points
Update time New bit of promotional artwork and another script sample. SAMPLE SEVEN
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Two illustrations inspired by scenes in my fanfilm script
First, one from Casey Jone's introduction And Leonardo from the Turtles battle in the park Leonardo and Splinter have a conversation while Don works away in his lab
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Update time!
Whew, 70 Pages in with more to come, but things are finally coming together, as I finally got to the scene April meets the Turtles face to face. This is where the story kicks into higher gear, as next comes our first meeting with Splinter, Casey fends off home invaders, and one of Shredder's "pet" projects visits a kindly old woman, prompting Mikey into action! It's all yet to come in this script. For now, enjoy another sample, taken from April and Irma's first meeting with Donatello and Raphael, when the four are interupted by two armed thugs, what kind of fireworks will ignite? Spoiler:
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10-18-2012, 03:46 PM | #12 |
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Wow. This is an awesome script, Zarius. I really like it, especially Leo's and Splinter's conversation. It was just so spot on and something they'd discuss. Nicely done on this so far. I'll be eagerly awaiting more.
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Thanks for your poitive comments Bubbly, I appreciate it. It's been a bit since I worked on this so it's nice to know someone's paying attention to it.
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10-19-2012, 07:22 AM | #14 |
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No problem, Zarius. I'm always happy to lend my support and review when I feel something is good.
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10-19-2012, 12:27 PM | #15 |
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I love the Irma comment at the end there! Made me smile. This is good, there's a really nice genuine interplay between the characters.
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10-19-2012, 04:35 PM | #16 |
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Thanks for the kind words. I'm cramming a lot of characters into this, from all aspects of the franchise, I'm quite keen to make them all have a part to play here.
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10-21-2012, 04:17 PM | #17 |
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Another sample, while it's taken from a much deeper portion of the story, it doesnt spoil much. Donatello meets a certain scientist we ALL should know by now..
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Wow. This was great. You have one mistake though. There should be they're as in they are. Other than that, good job. Can't wait to see more.
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No problem. Always glad to help out a fellow writer.
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