TMNT Project Dimension X Film Script

[EddieNES]

I just finished the first draft of my Ninja Turtle script.

Would love some blunt feedback from you guys for rewrites.

Its a very loooong script. I'm going to start trimming it down now to the proper script format.

Just looking to see how story flows, character development, plot holes, things that don't make sense, jokes that don't land, etc...

Be as brutal as you can so I can tweak it.

I also registered the story through WGA. So please don't try and steal it.
I worked pretty hard on this.

Thanks!
Share if you like it!

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1319478...-X-Film-Script

[Original TMNT Cartoon Fan]

I think TMNT will find it easier if you move it to the Ninja Turtles (main) section.

[Krutch]

Do you have it available as a PDF somewhere?

[EddieNES]

Originally Posted by Krutch

Do you have it available as a PDF somewhere?

I will shorty. I’m currently running it through Celtx to get it in the proper format. Once I’m done, I could upload the PDF.

I should be done with this in about 1 or 2 days depending how much I get done tonight.

[Kenwatanabesclone]

I like this a lot so far!

[EddieNES]

Originally Posted by Kenwatanabesclone

I like this a lot so far!

Thanks.
Lemme know what you think when you finish it.

[Original TMNT Cartoon Fan]

Originally Posted by EddieNES

Thanks.
Lemme know what you think when you finish it.

I'm checking it out and it's a great idea. However, one problem (and it's not you who began this)

Sometimes , you treat Dimension X as a galaxy (which is OK, the Archie comics actually went that route) and sometimes as a dimension or universe. So, what it is in your script?

[EddieNES]

Originally Posted by Original TMNT Cartoon Fan

I'm checking it out and it's a great idea. However, one problem (and it's not you who began this)

Sometimes , you treat Dimension X as a galaxy (which is OK, the Archie comics actually went that route) and sometimes as a dimension or universe. So, what it is in your script?

My Dimension X is another galaxy far from the Milky Way.
It was code named Dimension X by the US.

It’s never called Dimension X by anyone there.

[Original TMNT Cartoon Fan]

Originally Posted by EddieNES

My Dimension X is another galaxy far from the Milky Way.

That's my favourite take on Dimension X too. Meanwhile, it seems the government scientists first believe it is a dimension.

[EddieNES]

Here’s the link to the PDF First Draft. I believe you can download it from there.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1FxD...w?usp=drivesdk

[Original TMNT Cartoon Fan]

Will you write sequels too?

[EddieNES]

Originally Posted by Original TMNT Cartoon Fan

Will you write sequels too?

I’d like to. I need a break first.

I’ll see if I get any feedback from this one.

I have a general idea where story will go.

[Original TMNT Cartoon Fan]

Originally Posted by EddieNES

I have a general idea where story will go.

That's easy to understand when reading who Traag mentions at the end.

[EddieNES]

I’m starting to get notes together for the sequel. Finally might start to put pen to paper.

If anyone did happen to read some of this, I know it’s ridiculously long, lemme know what you thought.

Thanks.

[Wingnut II]

Originally Posted by EddieNES

I’m starting to get notes together for the sequel. Finally might start to put pen to paper.

If anyone did happen to read some of this, I know it’s ridiculously long, lemme know what you thought.

Thanks.

I just finished reading your script today --for reference point, I began reading it a few weeks ago---and it was tubular, to say the least.

[EddieNES]

Hey just saw this post.

Thanks man! Appreciate it.

Hopefully I’ll have another one at some point eventually.