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Hench Mutant
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new fan fic by me!
The Origin of Brandatello
I was livin’ with my buds, The Ninja Turtles when my life was changed forever! It all started when I said something to Raph that he hated! So he kicked me out of his room. We were room mates. I was walking around the sewer and I saw it! The ooze! I’ll just go throw it up and catch it. I threw it up in the air. But I fell asleep. It was still in the air. The next day I was mutated into a turtle! The turtles said “ what the shell? What the shell happened here, Brandon?” I said, “the ooze must have fallen on me when I was asleep.” Mikey said “well we got to give you a name?” “ how bout’ Brandatello.” Donny said. “OK” I said. Yeah well, he has to use the sais!” Raph said. “ how bout’ a lime green bandanna.” I said. “ Cowabunga !” Mikey said. I said “ yo guys I already know how to fight, from you guys.” “ how bout’ a pizza.” mikey said. “Cowabunga!” we all said.
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That's good. Short, but very good. It also has to be the shortest origin story that I have personally ever read.
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Brother against brother...........
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Set in the old toon I see.
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Hench Mutant
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what makes you think that?!? its my first one give me a break
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It's pretty good.
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Hench Mutant
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it has an ending now!!
The Origin of Brandatello I was livin’ with my buds, The Ninja Turtles when my life was changed forever! It all started when I said something to Raph that he hated! So he kicked me out of his room. We were room mates. I was walking around the sewer and I saw it! The ooze! I’ll just go throw it up and catch it. I threw it up in the air. But I fell asleep because I was tired. It was still in the air. The next day I was mutated into a turtle! The turtles said “ what the shell? What the shell happened here, Brandon?” I said, “the ooze must have fallen on me when I was asleep.” Mikey said “well we got to give you a name?” “ how bout’ Brandatello.” Donny said. “OK” I said. Yeah well, he has to use the sais!” Raph said. “ how bout’ a lime green bandanna.” I said. “ Cowabunga !” Mikey said. I said “ yo guys I already know how to fight, from you guys.” “ how bout’ a pizza.” mikey said. “Cowabunga!” we all said. “My sons, work hard with Brandatello!”splinter said. “Aw, man!” the turtles said. “My sons ten flips now!” Splinter said. “1...2..3...4...5...6..” the turtles shouted. Aghh, such energy wasted.” splinter said. “7...8..9...10!”shouted the turtles again! “Now help Brandatello!” splinter said. So all the turtles help me with my martial arts. I train every day from now on just like the turtles. “Now there is a 5th Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle in town and his name is Brandatello!” I said with joy!
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so... was this Brandatello, or Brandon fellow a human at first or what? you didn't exactly clarify that.
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Foot Soldier
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oh, and another question... if his name was brandon, why would he need a name again? shouldn't his name just be brandon, and not brandatello?
or is it because you just wanted him to have a tmnt esque name? |
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Hench Mutant
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yes and yes
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