Comic on the way

[Raven]

Leonardo One shot now up
http://www.geocities.com/kingsofpain408

Here is the cover provided by the talented Ryona
http://i104.photobucket.com/albums/m199/death_raven_2006/Alleywaydanger.jpg

and here is a colored version of my Leonardo Promo art

http://i104.photobucket.com/albums/m199/death_raven_2006/leocolored.jpg

(Trailer/teaser)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EocIRL3-WL8


Check back soon for news about the ongoing TMNT series

[Kaneda]

Nice vid MP.Can't wait for the comic should be awesome.

[Raven]

Thanks Kaneda.

Sense YouTube is down for the time I uploaded the video onto another site.

http://thumbs.vidiac.com/20ed8e8e-253c-41b7-8744-981e00fb6a33.jpg (http://video.freevideoblog.com/video/20ed8e8e-253c-41b7-8744-981e00fb6a33.htm)Click here to see Video (http://video.freevideoblog.com/video/20ed8e8e-253c-41b7-8744-981e00fb6a33.htm)



I'm guessing the comic should be up either tomorrow or Thursday.

[Sewer Bull]

Sense YouTube is down for the time I uploaded the video onto another site.

http://thumbs.vidiac.com/20ed8e8e-253c-41b7-8744-981e00fb6a33.jpg (http://video.freevideoblog.com/video/20ed8e8e-253c-41b7-8744-981e00fb6a33.htm)Click here to see Video (http://video.freevideoblog.com/video/20ed8e8e-253c-41b7-8744-981e00fb6a33.htm)


That sucks, I can only see a Party Poker ad there and nothing else happens. Oh well. I'll just wait for YouTube to revive. I'm looking forward to your work, dude.

[cowabunga14]

That preview was awesome. I liked the music you chose for it. Looks like this comic will be worth the wait.

[Raven]

Leonardo one shot is now up, and thanks all for the comments.

[Kaneda]

Wow nice work Raven!I really like your style of Splinter and Leo (he reminds me of the first movie).

[Sewer Bull]

Here is the cover provided by the talented Ryona
http://i104.photobucket.com/albums/m199/death_raven_2006/Alleywaydanger.jpg


Hey, how come I didn't see that pic yesterday? I remember it from one of Ryona's boards. It's nice and well done, me likes. Pity Ryona didn't produce any extra stuff on this cover, like the title or author's name or a catchy tag line, so that would look more like a pro comic cover. The empty space on the wall just asks for some graffiti-like text to be drawn on it.

About the comic itself... I really like the art. Your skills are amazing and you don't neglect the petty anatomical details. Reading your comic was a treat for my eyes. The plot was rather simple and heart-warming in the very end. Nothing too spectacular and deep but nice in general.

I didn't like the lettering tho'. It's legible but doesn't fit well with the climate of the whole story. It just looks rather artificial, like out of this world. Try choosing another font or maybe even lettering on your own.

And the navigation between the pages sucks, but I can see that this is the main problem of the site where your comic is hosted.

[Sliced]

This was great. You're talented my friend (we already knew that but...), this is one great tmnt comic.

But there's little things that bugged me. Its nothing too serious you'll see.

First, Splinter. If I didn't knew who where the tmnt, I would had thought that Splinter was a dog instead of a rat. In some shots he looked like a rat, but in most of them, he really looked like a Yorkshire Terrier. If you want, I'll provide examples of what I mean. I think that the only thing you would have to do to correct this, would be to draw his nose and his mouth a little more round.

Secondly, like Sewer Bull said, the font was not matching with the comic. I totally understand that you wanted us to be able to read it, but there's alot of fonts who could match with your comic perfectly, while still be easy to read. As for the story, I think that just a little more development would be enough to really add to the story, because I thought that this was going too fast when you could had added more to the characters.

Lastly, this is more of a personnal liking though. I found that your pencil was a bit too pale. The eyes loves contrast, and although we could see what was going on, maybe just to darken you pencil strokes a little would add to the impact factor of your comic.

That's it, other than those, your comic is awsome.

[Raven]

Thanks every one.

hhhhmmmm the font of the text I'll have to work on then, any suggestions for a good font? For the comic I just went with times new roman, its kind of hard to find a good font on MS paint. Maybe I'll just try lettering it straight onto the page, maybe I'll get better results from that?

Lastly, this is more of a personnal liking though. I found that your pencil was a bit too pale. The eyes loves contrast, and although we could see what was going on, maybe just to darken you pencil strokes a little would add to the impact factor of your comic.

Eh for that all I have to do is change my scanners setting, it likes to change on me once in awhile...... but I'll keep that in mind so that the lines are little bit more....um stand outish, heh. Thanks.

First, Splinter. If I didn't knew who where the tmnt, I would had thought that Splinter was a dog instead of a rat. In some shots he looked like a rat, but in most of them, he really looked like a Yorkshire Terrier. If you want, I'll provide examples of what I mean. I think that the only thing you would have to do to correct this, would be to draw his nose and his mouth a little more round.

eh I thought he only looked like a dog in one frame, ah well thanks I'll try to fix that in that furture.

again thanks every one, hoefully I'll remember to keep these in mind as I start up on the next project.

[Sewer Bull]

Lastly, this is more of a personnal liking though. I found that your pencil was a bit too pale. The eyes loves contrast, and although we could see what was going on, maybe just to darken you pencil strokes a little would add to the impact factor of your comic.


Yep, that came to my mind later.

hhhhmmmm the font of the text I'll have to work on then, any suggestions for a good font? For the comic I just went with times new roman, its kind of hard to find a good font on MS paint. Maybe I'll just try lettering it straight onto the page, maybe I'll get better results from that?

Times New Roman ain't the prettiest comic font ever in my opinion. If you're lacking good fonts, just download them from the net! Installed, they should be avalaible on MS Paint too.

http://www.blambot.com/
http://astigmatic.com/free_fonts.html
http://www.webpagepublicity.com/free-fonts-o2.html

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Or you can even create your own font: http://www.high-logic.com/fcp.html

But yeah - lettering straight onto the page shouldn't be that bad after all.

[Raven]

Before I start penciling the TMNT on going I want to try some thing quick with the leo one shot, I want to add tones after I ink it and change the world ballons.


This was just a test I put together to see if I would have to ink it, and looks like I should. Plus just to see if I could pull it off.

http://i104.photobucket.com/albums/m199/death_raven_2006/LEO002gre.jpg

[Sewer Bull]

I'd advise more contrast, Sir.