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Just now read both parts. I must say I really enjoyed it. The art is incredible, the mixing of universes is well done.
My only complaints would be some of my typical complaints when it comes to fan fiction. Raph being the super bad ass, gets old with me. The first scene where he basically beats up Mike, seemed forced.
I highly enjoyed the near nude April being tortured, it had such a classic fantasy anime charm to it. Amusing to the point I thought any minute now it was going to take a turn into some kind of Hentai, but I was pleased that it didn't. It just towed the line very well.
My major overall complaint though is the dialogue. It's good, but I counted at least 57 uses of the S word (Can we cuss here?) anyway that took a lot away from me. Some of them fit with the tone and others just seemed like the word was being pasted in at times.
I have half a mind to erase all the text and clean it up just to see how it would read.
Anyway, I want to give Tony major props as I love it. It's very nice, very well done and he's doing his own thing. I think there are ways it could improve, mostly with some minor dialgoue re-writes, but for the most part it's a fun piece of fan fiction with some of the best TMNT art work I've seen in comic form.
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