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**Kali** · 05-06-2002, 09:44 PM

Nah, say he looked like a dog or something.

*Skeletoncrew* · 05-06-2002, 09:47 PM

Ha! Thats perfect!!! Thanks Kali!

I made few more corrections and changed that bit.

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*Skeletoncrew* · 05-07-2002, 01:11 AM

Well, I was so amused by the whole thing that I ended up writing a second chapter! There will be one more...then thats it. I really didn't intend for this to be a long story.

SeaThreePeeO · 05-07-2002, 02:27 AM

Great story SC! Sadly Fanfiction.net won't let me review it for some reason.

So here is my review

I loved it! It was so much fun to read! I am glad to see Leo up to something other then whingeing.

And to all thoses Leo tortures out there. You should be ashamed of yourselves! Pick on Raph, that's what he's there for!

**Machias Banshee** · 05-07-2002, 04:16 AM

My poor lil' mind is forever in tatters... *snicker*

Man, i am loving your story! Even when i read the second chapter at whatever time it was at! Heheheh, better look out for the Splinter and Leo fans...

*Skeletoncrew* · 05-07-2002, 10:26 AM

I am rather surprised that I haven't been beaten yet for tarnishing Splinter's image. After all, he may have ended up talking to Raven...but he started out getting a private dance from her.

*Kameko* · 05-07-2002, 10:30 AM

Quote:

On 2002-05-07 13:26, Skeletoncrew wrote:
... After all, he may have ended up talking to Raven...but he started out getting a private dance from her.

erm...what?!?

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*Skeletoncrew* · 05-07-2002, 10:34 AM

I started writing a "mature" short story on a whim yesterday. Its at http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=763399 I've rated it NC-17 but it could probably be considered R. At least, if it was a movie it would be...I'm not quite sure how to rate fanfiction.

**Kali** · 05-07-2002, 10:40 AM

I'm never sure how to rate my stories either. I usually ask myself which one of my siblings would I let see/read this, the 7 year old, the 11 year old, or the 16 year old.

But I love that story! I'm sure Splinter has a good reason.

*Skeletoncrew* · 05-07-2002, 10:48 AM

Oh, he has a reason. I'm not sure how good it is though...

I'll start writing it today, with luck I'll get it up after work tonight. Uh, no pun intended.

**Kali** · 05-07-2002, 10:56 AM

Yay! *giggles* Well, I don't think he's too out of character. I never doubted that he was interested in women the way other males are. But the fact that he actually talked seriously with her, without lecturing, is very in character for him. I always knew he was a charmer.

**Machias Banshee** · 05-07-2002, 11:14 AM

Well he sure as heck aint a eunuch! *ahem* hehehe...

But Splinter is ALWAYS charming! Like Sean Connery or Anthony Hopkins....just with more---fur....uh yeah....

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*Kameko* · 05-07-2002, 11:33 AM

Whoa! Not half bad, SC! I don't read that type of story very often, but at least it was well-written. And funny, too. I had to keep a hand over my mouth to keep from laughing out-loud and drawing attention (I'm at school -- you know how it is). And it's a great response to that P.O.S. story that showed up a couple of weeks ago. You're gonna finish it, right? RIGHT? I hate starting a story and never finding out how it ends.

(~And yeah, I'd probably rate it an R, too. Especially with the possibilities for the next chapter...

~)

**Kali** · 05-07-2002, 11:38 AM

I second that! I thought it was kinda weird the way Raven reacted though. Not really bad, just unexpected, but it works out great!

*Skeletoncrew* · 05-07-2002, 05:59 PM

Well, she's a friendly outgoing kind of woman...As Don found out.

I've got the last chapter pretty much all ready to type up. With luck I'll have it done late tonight. (I'm just home on my lunchbreak right now.)

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**Machias Banshee** · 05-07-2002, 06:42 PM

OOOH, cant wait to see it!

*looks at watch* You have your lunchbreak at 6:30 pm?

*Skeletoncrew* · 05-08-2002, 01:46 AM

I worked 1pm to midnight today. Ick.

Well, the thrilling conclusion to Boys' Night Out is now up at Fanfiction.net! Wondering just what Splinter was doing there? Go find out!

**Kali** · 05-08-2002, 08:33 AM

LMAO! That last line was too much. Oddly, I still don't think this was out of character. I can understand how Splinter could be curious about what goes on there. And he admitted he was wrong about how he judged strippers and exotic dancers, I really liked that part.

*Kameko* · 05-08-2002, 10:51 AM

I loved that last line! I had to work so hard not to burst out laughing in Web Mastering this morning.

*Skeletoncrew* · 05-08-2002, 11:05 AM

I have to admit, I was tempted to keep going after that line...but I thought it would be best to let it rest. Here's what I had considered:

"I could have sworn you were wearing pants last time I saw you."

"Um..."

"Splinter, if I ever come home with a tattooed and pierced girl dressed in a miniskirt and a see-through shirt, and said 'Sensei, I'd like you to meet the love of my life, we got married last night;'would you say anything about it? Other than 'congratulations'?"

"Ahhhh...no."

"Okay. Then neither will I. Congratulations."

05-06-2002, 09:47 PM	#522
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	Ha! Thats perfect!!! Thanks Kali! I made few more corrections and changed that bit. _________________ "You're about the most aggressive thing I've ever sat on." <font size=-1>[ This Message was edited by: Skeletoncrew on 2002-05-07 00:52 ]</font>

05-07-2002, 01:11 AM	#523
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	Well, I was so amused by the whole thing that I ended up writing a second chapter! There will be one more...then thats it. I really didn't intend for this to be a long story. __________________ Adult TMNT fan art and fiction contest Now accepting entries!

05-07-2002, 02:27 AM	#524
SeaThreePeeO Mad Scientist Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: The Void Posts: 1,345	Great story SC! Sadly Fanfiction.net won't let me review it for some reason. So here is my review I loved it! It was so much fun to read! I am glad to see Leo up to something other then whingeing. And to all thoses Leo tortures out there. You should be ashamed of yourselves! Pick on Raph, that's what he's there for! __________________ Zombies, once you get past the stench of rotting flesh and their unhealthy obsession with brains, they're really nice people.

05-07-2002, 10:26 AM	#526
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	I am rather surprised that I haven't been beaten yet for tarnishing Splinter's image. After all, he may have ended up talking to Raven...but he started out getting a private dance from her. __________________ Adult TMNT fan art and fiction contest Now accepting entries!

05-07-2002, 10:34 AM	#528
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	I started writing a "mature" short story on a whim yesterday. Its at http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=763399 I've rated it NC-17 but it could probably be considered R. At least, if it was a movie it would be...I'm not quite sure how to rate fanfiction. __________________ Adult TMNT fan art and fiction contest Now accepting entries!

05-06-2002, 09:44 PM	#521
Kali Inactive Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: California! Posts: 11,101	Nah, say he looked like a dog or something.

05-07-2002, 04:16 AM	#525
Machias Banshee Super Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 17,163	My poor lil' mind is forever in tatters... snicker Man, i am loving your story! Even when i read the second chapter at whatever time it was at! Heheheh, better look out for the Splinter and Leo fans...

05-07-2002, 10:40 AM	#529
Kali Inactive Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: California! Posts: 11,101	I'm never sure how to rate my stories either. I usually ask myself which one of my siblings would I let see/read this, the 7 year old, the 11 year old, or the 16 year old. But I love that story! I'm sure Splinter has a good reason.

05-07-2002, 10:48 AM	#530
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	Oh, he has a reason. I'm not sure how good it is though... I'll start writing it today, with luck I'll get it up after work tonight. Uh, no pun intended. __________________ Adult TMNT fan art and fiction contest Now accepting entries!

05-07-2002, 10:56 AM	#531
Kali Inactive Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: California! Posts: 11,101	Yay! giggles Well, I don't think he's too out of character. I never doubted that he was interested in women the way other males are. But the fact that he actually talked seriously with her, without lecturing, is very in character for him. I always knew he was a charmer.

05-07-2002, 11:14 AM	#532
Machias Banshee Super Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 17,163	Well he sure as heck aint a eunuch! ahem hehehe... But Splinter is ALWAYS charming! Like Sean Connery or Anthony Hopkins....just with more---fur....uh yeah.... _________________ Last night I played a blank tape at full blast. The mime next door went nuts. <font size=-1>[ This Message was edited by: Machias Banshee on 2002-05-07 14:16 ]</font>

05-07-2002, 11:33 AM	#533
Kameko Sister to the TMNT Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Los Angeles, California, USA Posts: 2,756	Whoa! Not half bad, SC! I don't read that type of story very often, but at least it was well-written. And funny, too. I had to keep a hand over my mouth to keep from laughing out-loud and drawing attention (I'm at school -- you know how it is). And it's a great response to that P.O.S. story that showed up a couple of weeks ago. You're gonna finish it, right? RIGHT? I hate starting a story and never finding out how it ends. (~And yeah, I'd probably rate it an R, too. Especially with the possibilities for the next chapter... ~)

05-07-2002, 11:38 AM	#534
Kali Inactive Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: California! Posts: 11,101	I second that! I thought it was kinda weird the way Raven reacted though. Not really bad, just unexpected, but it works out great!

05-07-2002, 05:59 PM	#535
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	Well, she's a friendly outgoing kind of woman...As Don found out. I've got the last chapter pretty much all ready to type up. With luck I'll have it done late tonight. (I'm just home on my lunchbreak right now.) _________________ "You're about the most aggressive thing I've ever sat on." <font size=-1>[ This Message was edited by: Skeletoncrew on 2002-05-07 21:09 ]</font>

05-07-2002, 06:42 PM	#536
Machias Banshee Super Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 17,163	OOOH, cant wait to see it! looks at watch You have your lunchbreak at 6:30 pm?

05-08-2002, 01:46 AM	#537
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	I worked 1pm to midnight today. Ick. Well, the thrilling conclusion to Boys' Night Out is now up at Fanfiction.net! Wondering just what Splinter was doing there? Go find out! __________________ Adult TMNT fan art and fiction contest Now accepting entries!

05-08-2002, 08:33 AM	#538
Kali Inactive Moderator Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: California! Posts: 11,101	LMAO! That last line was too much. Oddly, I still don't think this was out of character. I can understand how Splinter could be curious about what goes on there. And he admitted he was wrong about how he judged strippers and exotic dancers, I really liked that part.

05-08-2002, 10:51 AM	#539
Kameko Sister to the TMNT Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Los Angeles, California, USA Posts: 2,756	I loved that last line! I had to work so hard not to burst out laughing in Web Mastering this morning.

05-08-2002, 11:05 AM	#540
Skeletoncrew Foot Elite Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Bearing in on your spicy brains Posts: 3,275	I have to admit, I was tempted to keep going after that line...but I thought it would be best to let it rest. Here's what I had considered: "I could have sworn you were wearing pants last time I saw you." "Um..." "Splinter, if I ever come home with a tattooed and pierced girl dressed in a miniskirt and a see-through shirt, and said 'Sensei, I'd like you to meet the love of my life, we got married last night;'would you say anything about it? Other than 'congratulations'?" "Ahhhh...no." "Okay. Then neither will I. Congratulations." __________________ Adult TMNT fan art and fiction contest Now accepting entries!