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For me there's zero difference between a couple of weeks and a couple of months
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"The Cheap Seats With The Clearest View" has concluded. It was always intended to be just a few chapters long, but I ended it prematurley because I got incredibly frustrated with the way I was telling the story. This is probably the most disjointed mess I've ever written and it'll be up to you lot to decide if it's alright the way it is or if I should delete the last two chapters and try to continue for as long as possible. I think I just need a break from these books
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Well, I do feel there's more potential coming up with this book, but I can understand where you're frustrated. I say leave it as is for now and if you want to get back into it after a break, then you can continue it from where you left off. And if you're stuck, you can always ask us what we'd like to see and to bounce ideas off of. I'd be glad to help with that if you need it.
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Yeah, that's the best way to do things. Sometimes bouncing ideas off of someone never hurts because they can help with the creative process.
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I decided to delete the last two chapters and do something else with the story, I'm open to suggestions on things
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Awesome. As I said on FF, I'd like to see more about the tournament and how the Turtles ended up fighting there, so that would be a good thing to elaborate on.
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You'll get more of that in the next chapter
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Yep, I read it. Awesome how you're setting things up.
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I'll explain my situation... Whenever I start off, I keep track of each of the characters here since these fanfics have strong continuity, so we have Leonardo, Donatello, Michelangelo, Raphael, April, and Irma at the present moment, but those story of events are multiplied twice now because I have to consider not only what's occurring now, but what happened to them in the past (how April got involved in fighting within the tournament, how Donatello became Don Hunt, how Donatello left the Turtles and Splinter, Splinter being kidnapped). Then there's another "layer" of events going on in terms of the mental/dream realm with Michelangelo, Donatello, and Irma. In addition there are reintroduced characters here: Baxter, Metalhead, the relevance of Sagan, the aspects of Pen Pal Soda ordeal, and after skimming through Chapter 8, I totally forgot that I had to consider Krang, Bebop, and Rocksteady too. Do you kind of see how everything is evolving in being too complex perhaps? Where more of the reader's effort is trying to figure out the series of events on what happened to who, at this time, because of this event, and how it affects the overall story rather than having a more relaxed narrative approach in accompanying the adventures the Turtles have had. This is an idea I'm throwing out there, but I think the reader needs some consistent stable setting (or environment or time frame) because the settings change so much with so many characters, it's hard for the reader to know what storyline is primarily important or what they can refer to if they lose track of things. I counted up the number times the setting changes within the eight chapters so far, and it does so 11 times. That's a lot... I hope what I said above helps in some way... and that it's articulate enough to describe the situation I'm in, in reading the complexity of this story. ...But then again, you know my reading style with details, so maybe I'm not reading this story in the best approach. Last edited by Refractive Reflections; 09-07-2014 at 04:46 PM. |
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Advice noted mate.
Since having my crisis of confidence, I've actually grown to like the style I've been using in the story. I was simply struggling with coming up with a way of shortening it, but now that it's going to be as long as I want it, not a whole lot is bugging me in regards to how I've paced it so far. If it's confusing you in any way I will try to rein it in and give everyone a much clearer picture with one specific setting, I sort of moved into that area with chapter eight as you will see |
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I actually had no idea you wanted this fanfic to be a certain length or pace, or from what I am assuming, you had this concept for your previous OT fanfics. I'm curious, how much did you have to edit or change for the sake of length or pacing with your previous fanfics? |
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I somewhat spend days on a direction, then realize it's not really where I want to take it, or I feel I'm falling into "fanfiction trappings" that I perhaps should not wisely indulge in (although sometimes it creeps in regardless of m intent), and rework it. I used to have a style in the earlier stuff where most of the chapters would be about two to three pages tops, and the penultimate chapters would be longer as a reward for readers who'd stuck through with it. Eventually I stopped doing that, probably so the story grabbed readers more in a shorter amount of length and leave them hanging a bit longer, |
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Rewrite of "Cheap Seats" completed and all six chapters uploaded. Now goes by the name "The Monocle"
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So I thought I'd update this thread with some news
As you may now know, even "The Monocle" was eventually taken down by me as I still wasn't satisfied with how the books were turning out, so I decided that, for most of 2015, they would be going on hiatus while I worked on other projects. That did'nt mean I was just going to let my universe gather dust, so here are all the in-continuity short stories I've written since then Two Steps Beyond To Discipline A Shadow Beat The Zoo At The Edge of the Cage The Order of the Day These stories ought to tie you over 'till I finally sit down and write the last two books. |
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I'm thinking of using a text-to-speech programme for audio readings of my stories, but I'm worried it won't pronounce some of the Turtles names right. I had a go with one programme on "Zoo at the Edge of the Cage" but Donatello's name didn't come out well.
Anyone have any suggestions? BTW, I started work on yet ANOTHER "book nine", ("The Well-Mannered Way") but I haven't updated it in ages and only Bubbly is really responding to it, I'm not going to delete it like I did the last two attempts at continuing this series, but I'm just very unmotivated with progressing it at the moment. |
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I was wondering if anyone would like to illustrate some of these stories as a comic series?
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These stories are really good, and I like how you took chances with stuff and pout new deatails in there (The dream plane thing with irma, ASpril and Casey already knowing each other, April being a fighter, etc.) not my ideal dream version of TMNT, but a very excellent version nonetheless. If this were an actual TMNT incarnation, I'd love to watch/read it! Good job!
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Ok, maybe trying to commission a comic book is a bit too out of my price range after all. Still, I wouldn't mind someone making some covers for these stories, I intend to publish them as PDF files on my blog when I'm done.
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