Turtle Turncoat - Page 47

Tony Day · 01-05-2013, 05:49 PM

Page 31 of Turncoat pt 4 is up.

night.

Tony

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*oldmanwinters* · 01-05-2013, 06:26 PM

I thought this was a pretty great couple of panels...

Aww...

*Refractive Reflections* · 01-06-2013, 02:04 AM

Page 30 and 31 with Raphael and April were very touching! The flashback on page 28 was very powerful and I'm glad you included that because it helped the reader to peer into Raphael's thoughts underneath the conflicted and tormented facial expressions. It's just my opinion but instead of Splinter saying "Remember where your heart is my son. Your heart will always lead back here to me...and your brothers." it would have risen the emotional impact more if Splinter said, "Remember where your heart is always cherished my son. Your heart will always be received with open arms here by me...and your brothers."

Awesome work as always Tony Day!

Tony Day · 01-06-2013, 07:34 PM

Page 32 of Turncoat pt 4 is up.

I won't go back and change it now as i'll have to go into photoshop again and mess around creating new speech bubbles etc... thanx for the suggestions though.

Nite

Tony

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*oldmanwinters* · 01-06-2013, 07:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Page 32 of Turncoat pt 4 is up.

I won't go back and change it now as i'll have to go into photoshop again and mess around creating new speech bubbles etc... thanx for the suggestions though.

Nite

Tony

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Personally, I like the shorter version. It's less wordy, but gets the point across.

Typo correction on p.32:
"It's been a long day, Raph."
and
"A lot of blood has been spilled..."

Tony Day · 01-06-2013, 08:02 PM

That was your version aswell Adam mate. Another reason I won't change it

correcting typo now.

,,, just checked online... and it says i can use both? Are u sure its just spilled?

*oldmanwinters* · 01-06-2013, 08:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

That was your version aswell Adam mate. Another reason I won't change it

correcting typo now.

,,, just checked online... and it says i can use both? Are u sure its just spilled?

We Americans like "spilled," but I suppose you good folks across the pond can get away with "spilt" if you like.

Tony Day · 01-06-2013, 08:12 PM

Phew.. Just went to bed and I didn't really want to get back onto photoshop again. As long as its gramatically correct i'll leave it as is... im knackered.

laterz

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*Jephael* · 01-06-2013, 09:20 PM

Whoa, pretty intense. I sure hope Splinter will be okay.

*oldmanwinters* · 01-06-2013, 09:30 PM

It's all cool, Tony. I remember once we had some debate about a phrase Bebop made not really resonating with American slang ("all in hand" or something like that).

Also, here's another crop of the Raph-April panels from pages 30-31. Out of curiosity, I ran a little quick color contrast/saturation on it to see what it did to the colors:

Is it just me, or does that make it look "cartoony-er" ?

*Refractive Reflections* · 01-07-2013, 12:23 AM

LOL, yeah it was wordy

(I'm more of fanfic writer LOL) ...but I meant something around that emotion.
It was just something minor where I thought instead of Splinter conveying a "you'll return to me" tone, it would strike more of a chord of fulfillment for Raphael to remember being adored/valued, for example: "Our home will always be open to your heart" or "Our home will always cherish your heart", since he was feeling so lost and directionless in the 2nd comic.

Just a personal thing...I wasn't expecting anything to be changed...

(LOL, if I'm thinking this deeply about it then you know I'm really invested in this great comic series.)

Wow, page 32 was a plot twist! Shredder setting up the Technodrome to self-destruct!

Tony Day · 01-07-2013, 07:27 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

Out of curiosity, I ran a little quick color contrast/saturation on it to see what it did to the colors. Is it just me, or does that make it look "cartoony-er" ?

I see what you mean. I always thought that a slight blurriness added something to 2d animations. The look of video and especially the look of 35mm film.

I hate the look of digital animation/art used in new cartoons with added lens flares and the need to create every non human object with cg etc. Everything looks so cheap and photoshoppy. Don't get me started on flash animations!
I think the same way when I compare an oil painting to a photoshop painting.. but hey, that’s just my personal taste

I better stop now before this turns into a massive rant.

Quote:

Originally Posted by JLS

Just a personal thing...I wasn't expecting anything to be changed...

(LOL, if I'm thinking this deeply about it then you know I'm really invested in this great comic series.)

Please feel free anytime JLS. I always welcome suggestions.. Although.. this comics almost over now, so there won’t be much opportunity to do so. Glad you're enjoying it though.

Have a good one everybody

Tony

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Tony Day · 01-12-2013, 03:44 PM

Hi... page 33 is up for viewing.

Laterz
Tony

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*oldmanwinters* · 01-12-2013, 03:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Hi... page 33 is up for viewing.

Laterz
Tony

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Aw, man, I can't wait till the next page...

Spoiler:

Tony Day · 01-12-2013, 08:22 PM

Cheers Adam. Corrected.

Page 34 is up for viewing..

nite nite

Tony

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*oldmanwinters* · 01-12-2013, 09:08 PM

Oh, boy, thank you for that page, Tony!

To quote Raphael from an old episode, "They blow up real good!"

*MikeandRaph87* · 01-12-2013, 09:14 PM

Did you just make '87 Shredder go boom!

I don't care if any other Shredder,but this version...between that and Raph stabbing Mike you go some 'slianin' to do Loosy Day! Boundaries I couldn't make myself pass.

Tony Day · 01-12-2013, 09:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

Oh, boy, thank you for that page, Tony!

To quote Raphael from an old episode, "They blow up real good!"

So what episodes that then?

Quote:

Originally Posted by MikeandRaph87

Did you just make '87 Shredder go boom!

I don't care if any other Shredder,but this version...between that and Raph stabbing Mike you go some 'slianin' to do Loosy Day! Boundaries I couldn't make myself pass.

Page 33 previously gives a hint about Shredders fate

*MikeandRaph87* · 01-12-2013, 11:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

So what episodes that then?

Page 33 previously gives a hint about Shredders fate

I know that Shredder's vitals were hooked up to the Technodrome so its imploding means he is biting it. Seemed like a simple stab wound though. Tapped up and a few weeks will be as good as new. However, I am just particularlly protective of Michleangelo,Raphael, and Shredder especially if they are of the '87 cartoon variety. Can't blame me can you?

**Jester** · 01-13-2013, 12:04 AM

I think he's talking about Rocksteady effecting a rescue.

01-05-2013, 05:49 PM	#921
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 31 of Turncoat pt 4 is up Page 31 of Turncoat pt 4 is up. night. Tony www.trydowave.com

01-05-2013, 06:26 PM	#922
oldmanwinters Overlord Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Between yesterday and tomorrow! Posts: 15,510	I thought this was a pretty great couple of panels... Aww... __________________ Experience the TMNT Fan Commentaries! Check out my TMNT fan comic, "Nothing to Fear"! View my sketch work! I'm selling some of my hard-to-find TMNT items!

01-06-2013, 02:04 AM	#923
Refractive Reflections Mad Scientist $Refractive Reflections's Avatar$ Join Date: Nov 2012 Posts: 2,371	Page 30 and 31 with Raphael and April were very touching! The flashback on page 28 was very powerful and I'm glad you included that because it helped the reader to peer into Raphael's thoughts underneath the conflicted and tormented facial expressions. It's just my opinion but instead of Splinter saying "Remember where your heart is my son. Your heart will always lead back here to me...and your brothers." it would have risen the emotional impact more if Splinter said, "Remember where your heart is always cherished my son. Your heart will always be received with open arms here by me...and your brothers." Awesome work as always Tony Day! Last edited by Refractive Reflections; 01-06-2013 at 02:18 AM.
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01-06-2013, 07:34 PM	#924
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 32 posted Page 32 of Turncoat pt 4 is up. I won't go back and change it now as i'll have to go into photoshop again and mess around creating new speech bubbles etc... thanx for the suggestions though. Nite Tony www.trydowave.com

01-06-2013, 09:20 PM	#929
Jephael That whack job behind you Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Carlisle, Pennsylvania Posts: 8,143	Whoa, pretty intense. I sure hope Splinter will be okay. __________________ "I like it. Simple, but effective!" Raphael; The Mean Machines - 1988

01-06-2013, 08:02 PM	#926
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	That was your version aswell Adam mate. Another reason I won't change it correcting typo now. ,,, just checked online... and it says i can use both? Are u sure its just spilled?

01-06-2013, 08:12 PM	#928
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Phew.. Just went to bed and I didn't really want to get back onto photoshop again. As long as its gramatically correct i'll leave it as is... im knackered. laterz www.trydowave.com

01-06-2013, 09:30 PM	#930
oldmanwinters Overlord Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Between yesterday and tomorrow! Posts: 15,510	It's all cool, Tony. I remember once we had some debate about a phrase Bebop made not really resonating with American slang ("all in hand" or something like that). Also, here's another crop of the Raph-April panels from pages 30-31. Out of curiosity, I ran a little quick color contrast/saturation on it to see what it did to the colors: Is it just me, or does that make it look "cartoony-er" ? __________________ Experience the TMNT Fan Commentaries! Check out my TMNT fan comic, "Nothing to Fear"! View my sketch work! I'm selling some of my hard-to-find TMNT items!

01-07-2013, 12:23 AM	#931
Refractive Reflections Mad Scientist $Refractive Reflections's Avatar$ Join Date: Nov 2012 Posts: 2,371	LOL, yeah it was wordy (I'm more of fanfic writer LOL) ...but I meant something around that emotion. It was just something minor where I thought instead of Splinter conveying a "you'll return to me" tone, it would strike more of a chord of fulfillment for Raphael to remember being adored/valued, for example: "Our home will always be open to your heart" or "Our home will always cherish your heart", since he was feeling so lost and directionless in the 2nd comic. Just a personal thing...I wasn't expecting anything to be changed... (LOL, if I'm thinking this deeply about it then you know I'm really invested in this great comic series.) Wow, page 32 was a plot twist! Shredder setting up the Technodrome to self-destruct! Last edited by Refractive Reflections; 01-07-2013 at 12:45 AM.
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01-12-2013, 03:44 PM	#933
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 33 of Turncoat Pt 4 is up. Hi... page 33 is up for viewing. Laterz Tony www.trydowave.com

01-12-2013, 08:22 PM	#935
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 34 is up! Cheers Adam. Corrected. Page 34 is up for viewing.. nite nite Tony www.trydowave.com

01-12-2013, 09:08 PM	#936
oldmanwinters Overlord Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Between yesterday and tomorrow! Posts: 15,510	Oh, boy, thank you for that page, Tony! To quote Raphael from an old episode, "They blow up real good!" __________________ Experience the TMNT Fan Commentaries! Check out my TMNT fan comic, "Nothing to Fear"! View my sketch work! I'm selling some of my hard-to-find TMNT items!

01-12-2013, 09:14 PM	#937
MikeandRaph87 Jedi Master Join Date: Dec 2011 Location: JLA Satellite Headquarters Posts: 11,188	Did you just make '87 Shredder go boom! I don't care if any other Shredder,but this version...between that and Raph stabbing Mike you go some 'slianin' to do Loosy Day! Boundaries I couldn't make myself pass. __________________ Michelangelo: This looks like a job for the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles! Raphael: Sheesh, Mikey this ain't a cartoon!

01-13-2013, 12:04 AM	#940
Jester Rat-faced Dude-guy Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Arkansas Posts: 26,301	I think he's talking about Rocksteady effecting a rescue. __________________ "Clearly, you're Ninja Turtling incorrectly." - Leo656