[Fanfic] TMNT Movie Script - The Green Door

SwiftNinjaFox · 05-10-2014, 12:49 AM

So I originally read the scrapped "Blue Door" script and, like many others, thought it was pretty bad, but one reason was I kept thinking "Why would you do that? This could be cool if you changed it a bit" when reading different parts.

So I decided to rewrite it myself, keeping the majority of the script in tact, keeping the overall story and beats and pacing and scenes exactly the same, but just changing various details to see if it made a better script.

So...have at it. Tear it apart. I just ask you read it with an open mind and remember...I wasn't completely rewriting the original, just modifying it.

Also, I haven't proof read or done a second pass on this. This is the first draft of my rewrite. And I make no promises of super witty dialogue either.

What do you think? Better than the Blue Door script? Equally horrible?

(Think this link should work)

CORRECTIONS TO MAKE

Michelangelo's name is listed with the incorrect spelling error
Traag's motivation for pursuing the turtles is unclear

05-10-2014, 12:49 AM	#1
SwiftNinjaFox Stone Warrior Join Date: Jan 2014 Location: Texas Posts: 924	TMNT Movie Script - The Green Door So I originally read the scrapped "Blue Door" script and, like many others, thought it was pretty bad, but one reason was I kept thinking "Why would you do that? This could be cool if you changed it a bit" when reading different parts. So I decided to rewrite it myself, keeping the majority of the script in tact, keeping the overall story and beats and pacing and scenes exactly the same, but just changing various details to see if it made a better script. So...have at it. Tear it apart. I just ask you read it with an open mind and remember...I wasn't completely rewriting the original, just modifying it. Also, I haven't proof read or done a second pass on this. This is the first draft of my rewrite. And I make no promises of super witty dialogue either. What do you think? Better than the Blue Door script? Equally horrible? (Think this link should work) CORRECTIONS TO MAKE Michelangelo's name is listed with the incorrect spelling error Traag's motivation for pursuing the turtles is unclear __________________ Ninja Fox Games & Geekery: http://ninjafoxgames..com/ Last edited by SwiftNinjaFox; 05-10-2014 at 04:57 PM.