Turtle Turncoat

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Quick question. Are you doing your own comic Adam!?

Tony

Yup! It's a modest 12 page project. But I would like to do two more issues around the same length.
http://forums.thetechnodrome.com/showthread.php?t=35270

[Tony Day]

Just had a look Adam.. Gotta say, im really impressed. Your works come along way. Keep up the good work mate. One thing though.. are u gonna add dialogue?

Also.. Page 38 of TTp3 is up.

Laterz all
Tony

www.trydowave.com

[Master Splinter]

The book is progressing nicely! Keep em coming!

-ms

[oldmanwinters]

It's always nice to get multiple pages in quick succession from you after a long layoff!

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Just had a look Adam.. Gotta say, im really impressed. Your works come along way. Keep up the good work mate. One thing though.. are u gonna add dialogue?

There is no dialogue for my comic; it simply tells the story through the art. Since I don't have much comic experience, I thought planning for dialogue bubbles would complicate my artistic process. Also... I'd rather have no dialogue than bad dialogue. Maybe next time I'll add some words!

EDIT:
Tony, I just realized that you misspelled "Macy's" on page 37 (unless you were trying to avoid copyright infringement, of course!).

[Tony Day]

Page posted...

... and thanx for the spelling correction. I'll leave that as it's a name. Nowadays I just cut and paste Alans script .

Laterz

www.trydowave.com

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Page posted...

... and thanx for the spelling correction. I'll leave that as it's a name. Nowadays I just cut and paste Alans script .

Laterz

www.trydowave.com

Oh! Great scene with Splinter, Tony! It's really getting me excited now!

I'll go ahead and list the grammatical corrections I noticed that might make it a little easier to read:

Spoiler:

Splinter's 2nd word bubble: "my family's soul" & I'm not really sure what "balance broken decades ago to be restored" means, I guess it's a reference to Shredder taking over the Foot Clan, right? It probably could be worded more clearly.

Splinter's 3d word bubble, "is another thing altogether, isn't it?" would probably work better than "though, no?"

Soldier's last word bubble; "if the intel's good" is the probably way to abbreviate "if the intel is good."

[Coola Yagami]

I like the story, but kinda wish you didn't go with the Splinter is old and dying stuff... Seems alot of fanfiction loves to dive into Splinter nearing death or having already died of old age.... Why is he that old and fragile anyway when he's around the same age as Shredder...?

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Coola Yagami

I like the story, but kinda wish you didn't go with the Splinter is old and dying stuff... Seems alot of fanfiction loves to dive into Splinter nearing death or having already died of old age.... Why is he that old and fragile anyway when he's around the same age as Shredder...?

Yes, fan fiction, indeed...

[Coola Yagami]

Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

Yes, fan fiction, indeed...

True... but he did survive all the way til volume 4... seeing as this was the very first issue... he still had alot of life left in him at the time....

[Bauer536]

Interesting comic. I like the concept. The only thing I don't like is the swearing of the S*** and F*** words. They don't really need to be there. The blood I can kind of handle. It's the cursing I find too much. Just as long as there's no nudity in it, I'll be fine.

What the heck is going on with Raph? This scares me. I've read a few slides from parts 1, 2, and 3. I can't believe what he has become. Plus, he was very rude in the beginning. I didn't like that he called Leo a "Self-Rightous idiot" and Don "Worse as him . . . brownish green nose." Plus, why did he threaten to kill Mike? It's like he's been possessed by some monster inside of him. Plus, he could have killed Splinter. Yet, I find it funny. He wants to get away from his family, and once the Shredder tempts him to join him, he says things as if he believed in his family? WTH? I don't think he realizes how stupid he's being.

Not to even mention, but I feel fights with words and just plain hitting and kicking okay. But whatever that was that Leo, Don, and Mike did to their brother was a shock. They're brothers. Why would they do this? I don't know.

This story is good though. The illustrations are fantastic.

[Tony Day]

Lol... I apologise about the swearing... but in my defence I was a completely different person then... I’ve been doing this comic for over 10 years now.
(I know, even I can’t believe it’s been that long!!!)

As for the Splinter thing. Don't know what’s gonna happen to him yet. I did have an idea from the start that there would be a progression and at the end everyone in it would have changed, moved on etc... abit like in real life... Still, nothings been written in stone yet, which it should have been. Turncoat is finally nearing its completion! Only 22 pages to go! The end of an era! (for me). Another funny thing about Splinter. I often forget that hes the same age as shredder... Its probarlby because hes written like some old fart most of the time .


Anyway. Glad yall enjoying it. Another page is up at my website.

Laterz

www.trydowave.com

[oldmanwinters]

Ha! Care to clue us in to some of the cameos in the seats? I know all those costumes must be significant, but I'm at a loss as to the references.

[Tony Day]

No cameos there mate.. maybe a solider from a couple of pages back (the one in the red armor in the front seat)... but, they all look the same really.

The only hidden thing in there is a decepticon sign on some guys back! But, I couldn't tell you why ...

I'll chuck a few in in future pages.

www.trydowave.com

[Coola Yagami]

I have to say, it would be an end to an era. It really was an awesome story. I liked the attention to old school and videogame detail like the robots from Enter the Shredder and the multi-colored Foot Soldiers, and you even got Mirage references like human Foot Ninja and Utroms mixed in there. I also like the way Shredder realizes he has nothing to do now that he achieved everything. Even when he has to fight the few remaining resistance groups out there, he's basically already at the top... and letting the world go to hell due to his boredom and sliding into insanity...

I guess the only part I could without is Donatello covered in crap. Just... no dude. I understand the humor and more 'real-world' aspect you were going with, since they do live in the sewers and all, but yuck man. lol.

[oldmanwinters]

I, likewise, have mixed feelings about the approaching conclusion to this comic, since I've been following it for over a decade. I always get excited when I see Tony has posted new updates. Still, something tells me those last 22 pages will probably take a while.

[Tony Day]

"Still, something tells me those last 22 pages will probably take a while"

LOL... made me laugh

[Tony Day]

Hi Ya'll!!....

Page 41 has been posted. Hope ya likes it.. more to come soon.

Tony

www.trydowave.com

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Hi Ya'll!!....

Page 41 has been posted. Hope ya likes it.. more to come soon.

Tony

www.trydowave.com

I'm starting to think the turncoat might be ...

Spoiler:

Baxter???

[Tony Day]

Hi Dudes!!! Page 42 is up. More soon

www.trydowave.com

[oldmanwinters]

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Hi Dudes!!! Page 42 is up. More soon

www.trydowave.com

It's getting exciting, Tony!

As far as grammar goes, you might want to change a sentence in the first panel to "as many foot as possible away from". The "as" phrase that currently exists reads a little strange.