[Fanfic] TMNT Movie Script - The Green Door

[SwiftNinjaFox]

So I originally read the scrapped "Blue Door" script and, like many others, thought it was pretty bad, but one reason was I kept thinking "Why would you do that? This could be cool if you changed it a bit" when reading different parts.

So I decided to rewrite it myself, keeping the majority of the script in tact, keeping the overall story and beats and pacing and scenes exactly the same, but just changing various details to see if it made a better script.

So...have at it. Tear it apart. I just ask you read it with an open mind and remember...I wasn't completely rewriting the original, just modifying it.

Also, I haven't proof read or done a second pass on this. This is the first draft of my rewrite. And I make no promises of super witty dialogue either.

What do you think? Better than the Blue Door script? Equally horrible?

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CORRECTIONS TO MAKE

Michelangelo's name is listed with the incorrect spelling error
Traag's motivation for pursuing the turtles is unclear

[electric_sheep]

Originally Posted by SwiftNinjaFox

So I originally read the scrapped "Blue Door" script and, like many others, thought it was pretty bad, but one reason was I kept thinking "Why would you do that? This could be cool if you changed it a bit" when reading different parts.

So I decided to rewrite it myself, keeping the majority of the script in tact, keeping the overall story and beats and pacing and scenes exactly the same, but just changing various details to see if it made a better script.

So...have at it. Tear it apart. I just ask you read it with an open mind and remember...I wasn't completely rewriting the original, just modifying it.

Also, I haven't proof read or done a second pass on this. This is the first draft of my rewrite. And I make no promises of super witty dialogue either.

What do you think? Better than the Blue Door script? Equally horrible?

(Think this link should work)

You actualy made it interesting, great job...

[SwiftNinjaFox]

Tried to drop in a few Easter eggs too

[Xav]

Why did you change Michelangelo's name to the misspelled version?

[SwiftNinjaFox]

Purely because I'm just so damn used to writing it that way from the original misspelling for him.

A simple find/replace of the Word version will fix that.

Honestly, about halfway through, I realized I was doing it and thought "dammit, remember to fix that." Obviously...I forgot.

When I finished it up, it was 2 in the morning and I decided "screw it, I'm just going to post as is." There are some points I think might actually not line up right, some plot points I think might be left hanging, stuff like that.

I wanted to go back and add something to solidify why Traag is relentlessly pursuing the turtles. In the original it was because they were the prophesied chosen ones. Removing that, I lost some motivation for his pursuit which I felt needed to be addressed. But no, I haven't done that in the first pass.

[MsMarvelDuckie]

I have to say, if this had been the script, I'd have definitely been in line! I still will, but this actually sounds really cool! Great job!