Turtle Turncoat - Page 42

*oldmanwinters* · 10-19-2012, 05:04 AM

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Originally Posted by Tony Day

"onomatopoeia!" ... had to look that one up...

Now I know what it means

I got the slash sound in my head and if I were to spell it it would probably sound abit like.... thshshhhh.. But that wouldn’t look so good on the page

Onomatopoeia is definitely a word worth knowing!

Ulisses31 · 10-19-2012, 02:02 PM

If someone makes comics onomatopoeias are good friends lol

Tony Day · 10-22-2012, 08:47 AM

Page 4 of Turncoat pt 4 is up. All pages from now on will contain my dialogue since Alan's dropped out. So! Adam. Please feel free to correct any grammar etc

Laterz
www.trydowave.com

P.s. Big fan of Ulysses 31 here. One of the best shows ever made.

Tony Day · 10-23-2012, 07:16 PM

Page 5 is up... more coming soon

www.trydowave.com

*oldmanwinters* · 10-23-2012, 08:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Page 4 of Turncoat pt 4 is up. All pages from now on will contain my dialogue since Alan's dropped out. So! Adam. Please feel free to correct any grammar etc

Tony, sorry to hear about Alan!

Yeah, feel free to send me the dialogue ahead of time, and I'll gladly review it.

In page 5, I found the following errors:

"realize" instead of "realise" (unless that's an acceptable spelling in the UK).

Whenever a person is addressed (in the case of "Yoshi" or "Saki") you need to isolate that name with some commas. Either,
"Yoshi, you will finally realize..."
or
"You will finally realize, Yoshi, that through..."
or
"Your arrogance blinds you yet again, Saki..."

Tony Day · 10-24-2012, 05:00 AM

Cheers for that Adam. I'll correct it now. I never leave a PSD backup of my comic so I always have to go in and edit the text on a graphical level, which is annoying. But. If you don't mind i'll do as you recommend and send over the dialogue to you before I complete the page. IDo you have a prefered place for me to send it? Like Facebook?

Tony Day · 10-24-2012, 06:53 PM

Hi all... posted page 6 of Turtle Turncoat pt 4 the final battle.

Also cleaned up my main home page. Now all 4 parts have their covers showing making it easier to navigate... sorta

.

More coming soon.

www.trydowave.com

*oldmanwinters* · 10-24-2012, 06:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Hi all... posted page 6 of Turtle Turncoat pt 4 the final battle.

Also cleaned up my main home page. Now all 4 parts have their covers showing making it easier to navigate... sorta

.

More coming soon.

www.trydowave.com

The confrontation finally comes to a head!

However, Shredder's grammar should be: "You were saying ?" instead of "You we're saying !"

For proofreading, feel free to contact me through any means, either by Facebook or email!

Tony Day · 10-24-2012, 07:07 PM

thanx again... i thought id skip sending u this page as there was so little dialogue... looks like i should of...
I will send u for the next page as theres gonna be more.

Cheers mate

Tony Day · 10-25-2012, 05:37 PM

Page 7 of Turncoat pt 4 is up

More soon...

www.trydowave.com

*oldmanwinters* · 10-25-2012, 06:16 PM

Wow, Tony, you are on a roll with pumping out these pages!

Tony Day · 10-25-2012, 06:58 PM

cheers adam... one of the benefits of not having to wait around for script is the fact that i can keep up with this kinda pace. Planing to keep up daily posts...but the weekend is approaching so i'll see how it turns out

Tony

Tony Day · 11-04-2012, 05:51 PM

Page 8 is posted. Laterz

www.trydowave.com

*oldmanwinters* · 11-04-2012, 05:54 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Page 8 is posted. Laterz

www.trydowave.com

The text font looks strange on this page. Is it different from what you had been using?

Spoiler:

I love the fighting!

Tony Day · 11-04-2012, 06:03 PM

Hi Adam. Cheers for the heads up. In fact I was anticipating it so I saved the file as a psd so i could alter the text at a later date. This is what caused the text to go funny though, I reduced size and saved as a jpeg before uploading without flattening it. Duh. All fixed now.

This page didnt have alot of dialogue going on but i;m really stuck for the next bit. Don't want it to sound crap.. do u mind if i run the script by you to get your opinion first?

tony

*oldmanwinters* · 11-04-2012, 06:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Hi Adam. Cheers for the heads up. In fact I was anticipating it so I saved the file as a psd so i could alter the text at a later date. This is what caused the text to go funny though, I reduced size and saved as a jpeg before uploading without flattening it. Duh. All fixed now.

This page didnt have alot of dialogue going on but i;m really stuck for the next bit. Don't want it to sound crap.. do u mind if i run the script buy you to get your opinion first?

tony

I'll be happy to do it!

Tony Day · 11-04-2012, 06:11 PM

sent u an email

*MikeandRaph87* · 11-04-2012, 06:41 PM

So...I just read this for the first time and it appears that you put the '87 cartoon villains into the movie verse.Well characterized and edgy yet fun. Interesting concept!

Tony Day · 11-05-2012, 08:01 PM

Cheers MikeandRaph87. Glad you like it.

Also. Page 9 of is up for viewing.

Laterz

www.trydowave.com

*oldmanwinters* · 11-05-2012, 08:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tony Day

Cheers MikeandRaph87. Glad you like it.

Also. Page 9 of is up for viewing.

Laterz

www.trydowave.com

Haha! Personally, I think the dialogue in the last panel is kinda witty! Brilliant piece of composition, Tony!

10-22-2012, 08:47 AM	#823
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 4 of Turncoat pt 4 is up. Page 4 of Turncoat pt 4 is up. All pages from now on will contain my dialogue since Alan's dropped out. So! Adam. Please feel free to correct any grammar etc Laterz www.trydowave.com P.s. Big fan of Ulysses 31 here. One of the best shows ever made.

10-23-2012, 07:16 PM	#824
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 5 of Turncoat pt 4 is up Page 5 is up... more coming soon www.trydowave.com

10-24-2012, 06:53 PM	#827
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 6 of Turncoat the final battle up. Hi all... posted page 6 of Turtle Turncoat pt 4 the final battle. Also cleaned up my main home page. Now all 4 parts have their covers showing making it easier to navigate... sorta . More coming soon. www.trydowave.com

10-25-2012, 05:37 PM	#830
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 7 of Turncoat pt 4 is up Page 7 of Turncoat pt 4 is up More soon... www.trydowave.com

10-25-2012, 06:16 PM	#831
oldmanwinters Overlord Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Between yesterday and tomorrow! Posts: 15,510	Wow, Tony, you are on a roll with pumping out these pages! __________________ Experience the TMNT Fan Commentaries! Check out my TMNT fan comic, "Nothing to Fear"! View my sketch work! I'm selling some of my hard-to-find TMNT items!

10-24-2012, 05:00 AM	#826
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Cheers for that Adam. I'll correct it now. I never leave a PSD backup of my comic so I always have to go in and edit the text on a graphical level, which is annoying. But. If you don't mind i'll do as you recommend and send over the dialogue to you before I complete the page. IDo you have a prefered place for me to send it? Like Facebook?

10-24-2012, 07:07 PM	#829
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	thanx again... i thought id skip sending u this page as there was so little dialogue... looks like i should of... I will send u for the next page as theres gonna be more. Cheers mate

10-25-2012, 06:58 PM	#832
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	cheers adam... one of the benefits of not having to wait around for script is the fact that i can keep up with this kinda pace. Planing to keep up daily posts...but the weekend is approaching so i'll see how it turns out Tony

11-04-2012, 05:51 PM	#833
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 8 of Turncoat part 4 is up Page 8 is posted. Laterz www.trydowave.com

11-04-2012, 06:03 PM	#835
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Hi Adam. Cheers for the heads up. In fact I was anticipating it so I saved the file as a psd so i could alter the text at a later date. This is what caused the text to go funny though, I reduced size and saved as a jpeg before uploading without flattening it. Duh. All fixed now. This page didnt have alot of dialogue going on but i;m really stuck for the next bit. Don't want it to sound crap.. do u mind if i run the script by you to get your opinion first? tony

11-04-2012, 06:11 PM	#837
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	sent u an email Last edited by Tony Day; 11-04-2012 at 06:21 PM.

11-04-2012, 06:41 PM	#838
MikeandRaph87 Jedi Master Join Date: Dec 2011 Location: JLA Satellite Headquarters Posts: 11,188	So...I just read this for the first time and it appears that you put the '87 cartoon villains into the movie verse.Well characterized and edgy yet fun. Interesting concept! __________________ Michelangelo: This looks like a job for the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles! Raphael: Sheesh, Mikey this ain't a cartoon!

11-05-2012, 08:01 PM	#839
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 9 of turncoat pt 4 is up. Cheers MikeandRaph87. Glad you like it. Also. Page 9 of is up for viewing. Laterz www.trydowave.com