cpBunny says HI! - Should Leo be the next Neo Shredder?

cpBunnyAL · 03-26-2009, 12:24 AM

Hello to all,
I'm new to this forum, but not at Deviantart. I have plenty of (what I've been told by others) quality entertainment from art to fan fiction. It makes me happy to make others happy when they enjoy my works of art and fan fiction. So feel free to visit me and let me know what you think:

http://alaer.deviantart.com/

Since this a TMNT forum, here's the link to my TMNT fic, which will have Leo becoming the Neo Shredder while he and his brothers are forced to be Karai's assassins and allies against the war between Shredder's real son, Kano, and Hun.

Please tell me if it's any good or a worthwhile story to tell (but please try to read all of it, don't judge it by a chapter or two - I hope to give many much enjoyable entertainment through my works):

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4870097/...f_Turtle_Trust

This is not just a Leo story, but a Raph, Don, and Mikey story all in one. The story starts out with April accusing Raph of doing the unspeakable to her daughter (aka child abuse, which he is innocent of but she doesn't believe him) and they have a very bad falling out from it all. Mikey is very depressed, but the others don't know why (read to find out!).

Once Leo is nearly killed by Kano's men, the Turtles hunt them down. Mikey has nightmares of them going into an advanced mutation stage and becoming mindless killers. The nightmares are warning for things to come and they need a cure quickly. Karai has the cure thanks to Leatherhead (who is being 'controlled' by Bishop), but it's not compatible for the Turtles (insert Don here).

In order to obtain the cure, Leo is forced into an oath with Karai to help her against Kano and Hun (who want her dead and out of the way so they continue robbing, killing, and dealing drugs, etc).
All the Turtles are featured here- first Leo and then Mikey, then Raph and Don. I let them all have a chance to tell the story the way they see it (though not in first person).

The only thing I edit out would be the cussing / swearing in my own way. It's not super M rated or anything, but it's a story more for teens and adults than kids. There's love interests, but there's plenty of action and drama / turmoil between all the characters. Please read with an open mind as this is my first time writing anything TMNT. Reviews are highly appreciated!

If Machias Banshee reads this, please know that I loved your 'No Place to Call Home' Raphael fic. It was wonderful and it's been a while since I read something this great and well-written. Please don't abandon it, as I want to know if Raph gets back with his family. I hardly read fics unless they pass in quality, which yours easily did. You helped me be more of a Raph fan than before. Thanks again!

Thanks to all who read this and get enjoyment from my art and fics. I hope to make many friends here and provide more fun stuff in the future.

(Inquiry: How does one make signatures here? Or do you have to be certain level first?)

*Magdolin* · 03-26-2009, 10:17 AM

Hello there. Welcome! ^_^ I hope you enjoy it here. As for your question, go to user CP, look on the left. There will be a list. look through it, and you should see the thing that says "Edit Signature." Click that, and ta-da. If you need help getting a picture in your sig, ask around. I'm sure the staff and other people here would love to help you.

*KROW* · 03-26-2009, 05:22 PM

Welcome to the boards, Al. I can call you "Al," right?

Nice artwork. I can't read your fics at the moment because my ocular cavities are pulsating right now, but from the synopsis you've given, it sounds nifty. Hope you have fun here and remember to flush.

cpBunnyAL · 03-28-2009, 10:05 AM

Thanks to Rue x Mint and KROW for the welcomes. ^_^ Hope your eyes are feeling better KROW so you can read my fic. Tell me what you think, I'd love some feedback (goes to all who see this too). Thank you again!

NiNi · 03-29-2009, 04:25 AM

xD Awesome! You're in the 'Drome too! Welcome! ^^

*Magdolin* · 03-29-2009, 08:47 AM

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Originally Posted by cpBunnyAL

Thanks to Rue x Mint and KROW for the welcomes. ^_^ Hope your eyes are feeling better KROW so you can read my fic. Tell me what you think, I'd love some feedback (goes to all who see this too). Thank you again!

Your welcome!

Bigfoot · 04-02-2009, 11:31 PM

Hello Bunny, and welcome to the 'Drome.

I hang out alot in the forum games area, but wonder aimlessly and harmlessly through out the rest of the boards...

I like checking deviant art users, and there are a lot of them here. Look forward to your work...

See you around.

03-26-2009, 12:24 AM	#1
cpBunnyAL Mouser Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 10	cpBunny says HI! - Should Leo be the next Neo Shredder? Hello to all, I'm new to this forum, but not at Deviantart. I have plenty of (what I've been told by others) quality entertainment from art to fan fiction. It makes me happy to make others happy when they enjoy my works of art and fan fiction. So feel free to visit me and let me know what you think: http://alaer.deviantart.com/ Since this a TMNT forum, here's the link to my TMNT fic, which will have Leo becoming the Neo Shredder while he and his brothers are forced to be Karai's assassins and allies against the war between Shredder's real son, Kano, and Hun. Please tell me if it's any good or a worthwhile story to tell (but please try to read all of it, don't judge it by a chapter or two - I hope to give many much enjoyable entertainment through my works): http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4870097/...f_Turtle_Trust This is not just a Leo story, but a Raph, Don, and Mikey story all in one. The story starts out with April accusing Raph of doing the unspeakable to her daughter (aka child abuse, which he is innocent of but she doesn't believe him) and they have a very bad falling out from it all. Mikey is very depressed, but the others don't know why (read to find out!). Once Leo is nearly killed by Kano's men, the Turtles hunt them down. Mikey has nightmares of them going into an advanced mutation stage and becoming mindless killers. The nightmares are warning for things to come and they need a cure quickly. Karai has the cure thanks to Leatherhead (who is being 'controlled' by Bishop), but it's not compatible for the Turtles (insert Don here). In order to obtain the cure, Leo is forced into an oath with Karai to help her against Kano and Hun (who want her dead and out of the way so they continue robbing, killing, and dealing drugs, etc). All the Turtles are featured here- first Leo and then Mikey, then Raph and Don. I let them all have a chance to tell the story the way they see it (though not in first person). The only thing I edit out would be the cussing / swearing in my own way. It's not super M rated or anything, but it's a story more for teens and adults than kids. There's love interests, but there's plenty of action and drama / turmoil between all the characters. Please read with an open mind as this is my first time writing anything TMNT. Reviews are highly appreciated! If Machias Banshee reads this, please know that I loved your 'No Place to Call Home' Raphael fic. It was wonderful and it's been a while since I read something this great and well-written. Please don't abandon it, as I want to know if Raph gets back with his family. I hardly read fics unless they pass in quality, which yours easily did. You helped me be more of a Raph fan than before. Thanks again! Thanks to all who read this and get enjoyment from my art and fics. I hope to make many friends here and provide more fun stuff in the future. (Inquiry: How does one make signatures here? Or do you have to be certain level first?)

03-26-2009, 10:17 AM	#2
Magdolin Professional Dork Join Date: May 2005 Location: Society of Midnight Ninjas. Posts: 1,970	Hello there. Welcome! ^_^ I hope you enjoy it here. As for your question, go to user CP, look on the left. There will be a list. look through it, and you should see the thing that says "Edit Signature." Click that, and ta-da. If you need help getting a picture in your sig, ask around. I'm sure the staff and other people here would love to help you. __________________ "When life gives you lemons, make yourself some pie. Or squeeze 'em in people's eyes and run away, whatever floats your boat."

03-26-2009, 05:22 PM	#3
KROW Meat-n-Potatoes Man Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: State's Anus, NY Posts: 6,472	Welcome to the boards, Al. I can call you "Al," right? Nice artwork. I can't read your fics at the moment because my ocular cavities are pulsating right now, but from the synopsis you've given, it sounds nifty. Hope you have fun here and remember to flush. __________________ - Optimus Acid Trip - Cult of a Half-Shell - Raiden's Bitter Tongue - *I don't try to be funny; I fail at it naturally.*

03-28-2009, 10:05 AM	#4
cpBunnyAL Mouser Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 10	Yes you may call me Al :) Thanks to Rue x Mint and KROW for the welcomes. ^_^ Hope your eyes are feeling better KROW so you can read my fic. Tell me what you think, I'd love some feedback (goes to all who see this too). Thank you again! __________________ -AL aka cpBunny See my TMNT art and stories: http://alaer.deviantart.com/ Read my latest TMNT stories at http://www.fanfiction.net/~alaerkino Darkest NT Evolution - Leo Willingly Becoming Dark & a Don X April plot Meptiles Sequel of DoTT April O'Neil is Now a Mutant Ninja Turtle Also see my DA site for the adult fic FF.net removed - Donatello's Desire (redone & explicit) http://alaer.deviantart.com/gallery/...tello-s-Desire If you enjoy my works, please review

03-29-2009, 04:25 AM	#5
NiNi Hench Mutant Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Maryland Posts: 369	xD Awesome! You're in the 'Drome too! Welcome! ^^ __________________ DeviantArt ~ FurAffinity

04-02-2009, 11:31 PM	#7
Bigfoot Stone Warrior Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Wandering aimlessly... Posts: 764	Hello Bunny, and welcome to the 'Drome. I hang out alot in the forum games area, but wonder aimlessly and harmlessly through out the rest of the boards... I like checking deviant art users, and there are a lot of them here. Look forward to your work... See you around. __________________