Turtle Turncoat - Page 43

*MikeandRaph87* · 11-05-2012, 08:11 PM

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Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

Haha! Personally, I think the dialogue in the last panel is kinda witty! Brilliant piece of composition, Tony!

Agreed!

I was most shocked at Shredder actually killing Krang outright instead of holding him prisioner and or making him suffer. Puts the edge back in Shredder if anything!

Care to have a little fun with these characters at Christmas over in roleplay?

*oldmanwinters* · 11-05-2012, 08:14 PM

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Originally Posted by MikeandRaph87

Care to have a little fun with these character at Chrsitmas over in roleplay?

Sorry, bud, I'm just not much of a role-play kind of guy! I own all those Palladium RPG books just for their art value.

*MikeandRaph87* · 11-05-2012, 08:19 PM

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Sorry, bud, I'm just not much of a role-play kind of guy! I own all those Palladium RPG books just for their art value.

Let's just say I was surprised at how close our fanfiction ideas are and along with your stellar commentary alongside Jester/Kevin , well I couldn't help but ask. You bring $100 to the table instead of the usual two cents from the regular joe around here.

My only question as far as Turtle Turncoat goes is Baxter Stockman,he never mutates and is in the employ of the Shredder just not shown much? How was he worked in this '87 cartoon villains meets the movie verse?

Edit:Is this little masterpiece really 7 years in the making?

Even the more impressive!

Tony Day · 11-06-2012, 09:08 AM

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Originally Posted by MikeandRaph87

Edit:Is this little masterpiece really 7 years in the making?

Even the more impressive!

If u mean my comic. I think it’s coming close to 12 years now.

This is because I'm a lazy sod

To answer the question about Baxter. He's there as a plot device as well as a cameo character. The comic is an amalgamation of the first Turtles movie, the 80s cartoon and the 89 Arcade game. My three fave things in the Turtles universe by far. You can find elements of all three throughout Turncoat.

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*MikeandRaph87* · 11-06-2012, 09:21 AM

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Originally Posted by Tony Day

If u mean my comic. I think it’s coming close to 12 years now.

This is because I'm a lazy sod

To answer the question about Baxter. He's there as a plot device as well as a cameo character. The comic is an amalgamation of the first Turtles movie, the 80s cartoon and the 89 Arcade game. My three fave things in the Turtles universe by far. You can find elements of all three throughout Turncoat.

www.trydowave.com

Don't worry about it. I have been talking about posting fanfiction I did years ago after I clean it up,but have no idea when I will get to it so I can relate and its just script form not comic form. They say the more time spent on it the better it will be.

As for Baxter,his appearance just seemed random and I was trying to figure out if how he got roped into Shredder's employ.

What happened exactly to Bebop amd Rocksteady? They disappeared right before Baxter showed up.

Tony Day · 11-06-2012, 05:06 PM

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Originally Posted by MikeandRaph87

What happened exactly to Bebop amd Rocksteady? They disappeared right before Baxter showed up.

They'll make a final appearance i think

*Jephael* · 11-07-2012, 04:08 PM

You know something interesting just occured to me as I was reading the most recent page. Throughout the course of the original cartoon Shredder's referred to Leonardo, Donatello and Michaelangelo each by their names on different occasions, but has only referred to Raphael as "Turtle" or "Turtles" if adressed along with his brothers.

Tony Day · 11-07-2012, 06:30 PM

Hello everyone...

I've just posted page 10.

More soon

Tony

www.trydowave.

*ZariusTwo* · 11-08-2012, 12:42 PM

I've been thinking...we need a Tv Tropes page for this project. That site allows noticable fanfics/fancomics with cult followings to have articles (there's one for "Of Mice and Mayhem" for example)

Tony Day · 11-08-2012, 06:12 PM

Hello guys. Page 11 of turncoat 4 has been posted.

Laterz

Tony

www.trydowave.com

*MikeandRaph87* · 11-08-2012, 06:53 PM

How many pages to go and how many will this whole 4 part storyline end up being?

Tony Day · 11-08-2012, 07:31 PM

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Originally Posted by MikeandRaph87

How many pages to go and how many will this whole 4 part storyline end up being?

Around 30 pages. Maybe more, maybe less. As the title suggests, it's basically the final showdown and ending. It was originally going to end at part 3 but I only had 7 pages to spare. Not nearly enough space. I created this final part in order to not rush the ending.
My main problem is the writing. Since my mate Alan dropped out it’s now up to me to write again. I’ve got the story in my head but my writing skills have never been great. I really want to avoid screwing it up so luckily I got Adam onboard. He helps me by making suggestions and corrections which I greatly appreciate

*MikeandRaph87* · 11-08-2012, 08:15 PM

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Originally Posted by Tony Day

Around 30 pages. Maybe more, maybe less. As the title suggests, it's basically the final showdown and ending. It was originally going to end at part 3 but I only had 7 pages to spare. Not nearly enough space. I created this final part in order to not rush the ending.
My main problem is the writing. Since my mate Alan dropped out it’s now up to me to write again. I’ve got the story in my head but my writing skills have never been great. I really want to avoid screwing it up so luckily I got Adam onboard. He helps me by making suggestions and corrections which I greatly appreciate

That is what I was going to suggest,have Adam on to script what you plot and I would be more than happy to help on the condition no turtle kills(I have a hang up about that).

The plot/script partnership was how Justice League/Unlimited was done. Granted it was a cartoon and storyboards and scripts are different from a typed script and comic panels.

*oldmanwinters* · 11-08-2012, 08:49 PM

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Originally Posted by MikeandRaph87

That is what I was going to suggest,have Adam on to script what you plot and I would be more than happy to help on the condition no turtle kills(I have a hang up about that).

The plot/script partnership was how Justice League/Unlimited was done. Granted it was a cartoon and storyboards and scripts are different from a typed script and comic panels.

I don't actually have any say on the plot. I just try to clean up the grammar and make suggestions as to the best possible dialogue, as Tony stated.

So, yeah, I can't change anything about Tony's super-secret resolution of how the Neutrinos come busting in and drop a nuclear bomb on everybody at the very end.

*MikeandRaph87* · 11-08-2012, 09:06 PM

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Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

I don't actually have any say on the plot. I just try to clean up the grammar and make suggestions as to the best possible dialogue, as Tony stated.

So, yeah, I can't change anything about Tony's super-secret resolution of how the Neutrinos come busting in and drop a nuclear bomb on everybody at the very end.

Well, Tony could be Paul Dini writing the plot while you can be Dwayne McDuffie and write the dialogue.

Well,that plot resolution works better than Shredder's super sword being taken away by an interdimensional antique dealer who comes out of nowhere to quickly resolve a plot.

Tony Day · 11-09-2012, 05:49 AM

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Originally Posted by oldmanwinters

So, yeah, I can't change anything about Tony's super-secret resolution of how the Neutrinos come busting in and drop a nuclear bomb on everybody at the very end.

. Made me laugh

Tony Day · 11-11-2012, 12:37 PM

Page 12 of turncoat 4 is up

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Tony Day · 11-13-2012, 06:20 PM

Page 13 of Turncoat the final battle is up. Laterz

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*MikeandRaph87* · 11-13-2012, 06:34 PM

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Originally Posted by Tony Day

Page 13 of Turncoat the final battle is up. Laterz

www.trydowave.com

This is one section I rarely visit because I need time to soak in and enjoy it which is why I only discovered it about ten days ago. Dasha Ko and your art is strikingly similar. Maybe your soul brothers in the form of art. Nice job. Rarely did the '87 cartoon or realted material get this tense. I know the TMNT will come out on top,but at what cost?

The lives of Zach and Carter I hope.

*oldmanwinters* · 11-13-2012, 07:04 PM

Art on the last two pages looks great, Tony!

Dialogue seems to work well enough. Just try to remember that whenever a character's name is used in a direct address that it needs to be either followed, preceded, or enclosed by commas.
http://www.cliffsnotes.com/study_gui...Id-251323.html

That practice improves the clarity and readability of a sentence.

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Originally Posted by MikeandRaph87

Dasha Ko and your art is strikingly similar. Maybe your soul brothers in the form of art. Nice job.

Dasha is female.

11-07-2012, 04:08 PM	#847
Jephael That whack job behind you Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Carlisle, Pennsylvania Posts: 8,143	You know something interesting just occured to me as I was reading the most recent page. Throughout the course of the original cartoon Shredder's referred to Leonardo, Donatello and Michaelangelo each by their names on different occasions, but has only referred to Raphael as "Turtle" or "Turtles" if adressed along with his brothers. __________________ "I like it. Simple, but effective!" Raphael; The Mean Machines - 1988

11-07-2012, 06:30 PM	#848
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 10 of turncoat pt 4 is up Hello everyone... I've just posted page 10. More soon Tony www.trydowave.

11-08-2012, 12:42 PM	#849
ZariusTwo Overlord Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Britain, DINO THUNDER...POWER UP! Posts: 22,507	I've been thinking...we need a Tv Tropes page for this project. That site allows noticable fanfics/fancomics with cult followings to have articles (there's one for "Of Mice and Mayhem" for example) __________________ Spider-Man: The Rescue Spider-Man: The Galloping Cat Spider-Man: Scarlet Mirror Doctor Who: Child of the Daleks

11-08-2012, 06:12 PM	#850
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Turncoat pt 4 page 11 is up. Hello guys. Page 11 of turncoat 4 has been posted. Laterz Tony www.trydowave.com

11-08-2012, 06:53 PM	#851
MikeandRaph87 Jedi Master Join Date: Dec 2011 Location: JLA Satellite Headquarters Posts: 11,188	How many pages to go and how many will this whole 4 part storyline end up being? __________________ Michelangelo: This looks like a job for the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles! Raphael: Sheesh, Mikey this ain't a cartoon!

11-11-2012, 12:37 PM	#857
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	New page posted Page 12 of turncoat 4 is up www.trydowave.com

11-13-2012, 06:20 PM	#858
Tony Day Stone Warrior Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Indiana Posts: 559	Page 13 up Page 13 of Turncoat the final battle is up. Laterz www.trydowave.com